Waking Death

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  1. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Drunk off the inoxication of silence
    I stumble upon voices ever echoing,
    My hands bleed pain
    impaled by transparent shards as I free time from its hour glass,
    as I glance from focus point to focus point
    my eyes instinctively inhale the colors they are drug
    not a substance
    physically they remain non-existant,
    I cannot walk,
    the motionless is attributed to the paralysis
    of realization,
    I am subdued by weary thoughts that are cinderblocks upon my once non-scarred shoulders,
    I am Atlas walking into the depths of a sea of a mind
    where even the fish of mentality
    drown,
    screams,
    terror,
    no blood this time dragon be silent
    swiftly escape and let me hold
    on to your scales,
    breathe,
    I am trying but my lungs overdosed on suffocation
    now mocking me the air recycles it's purest form,
    think,
    trap,
    run,
    dont,
    I fall into the waiting arms of a fallen angel who
    breaks through the crust and rises from
    the underworld,
    misguided,
    I am a vision cloaked and holding a scythe waiting
    to swing this disgarded weapon
    of soul absorbtion at the first
    person I see,
    when I gaze into my reflection.
    test
  2. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    my new favorite piece on the board- awesome ^^
    test
  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "I am Atlas walking into the depths of a sea of a mind"

    Dope line. Have to say this was a very impressive piece. Keep it up

    one luv
    test
  4. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Thank you both for your words, it means alot and I honestly appreciate...thank you....much love
    test
  5. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    same line i was gonna quote...by far my fav piece by u so far.....great piece...looking forward to more pieces like this from u
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  6. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    wow..incredibly nice piece...good job all i can say is wow
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  7. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Thank you very much for your replies, greatly appreciated
    test
  8. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i enjoy your stuff more with every piece i read from you!.....our collab is going to be fire.....

    peace and blessings

    (i cant find the non rhyming piece)
    test
  9. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    i really liked it, and like Unspoken1 said is all i can say to this, wow
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  10. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Thanks for the love, gives me confidence to try different styles now and then..greatly appreciated..much love

    peace
    test
  11. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    why are u soo fuckin good kid damn bro u blew me away with that whole peace bro damn love it beautiful just beautiful
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  12. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    MisterEThoughts, wow, thanks for the love bro...im glad you felt like that after reading my shit...really really 'preciated...much love

    peace
    test
  13. disciplestylez

    disciplestylez Broken Soul

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    this was a hot piece fo real......got me to thinkin na mean? lol but yea....great piece, definately enjoyed reading it......

    GOD bless
    test
  14. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Damn I'm sorry to have been sleeping on this, i have read some of your other pieces before and thought they were good but this one was incredible. You and Xero Satsujin have got to be my 2 of my favorite poets on the board. Man great piece


    stay up, much love, peace
    test
  15. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    disciplestylez if it got you thinking then I am happy ;) but thanks for the reply its greatly appreciated,

    allnakey thanks for the love, it means alot to hear those kind of things, thank you very much

    both of you thanks for the love
    test
  16. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    nice piece mos defintily
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  17. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    im with everyone else....this was an incredible piece i too have read some of your other poems but this was truely the best! keep it up
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  18. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    j$crILLa , *Princess* thank you very much for the replies and kind works, greatly 'preciated
    test
  19. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Very beautiful...had to read it three times, but still beautiful....


    impaled by transparent shards as I free time from its hour glass,

    ^^^ dont know why but that line stuck out to me the most

    mad love
    test
  20. That_Bitch

    That_Bitch Stimulatin' your mind

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    love the format and flow...very tight
    favorite line:
    I am Atlas walking into the depths of a sea of a mind where even the fish of mentality drown,
    test
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