Waiting for you

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  1. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=9044353#post9044353
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=9041152#post9041152
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?p=9044402#post9044402


    This is just something I wrote pretty quickly and I know it is pretty simple, but it is nonetheless from my heart, everything that I am feeling at this very moment. JUNE 8TH 2004

    FOR DSM


    Someday you could be my reality
    I believe it, will you too ?
    Each day I bite my tounge
    from revealing the words
    I desperatly want to breathe to you
    But I am afraid
    like all the others
    that too fast
    is really too fast
    I want to run away with you
    You are just too precious to me right now
    I can't let you go on without me
    Someday it will be you I awake to
    all I need is for you to believe it too
    I want to hear it from you
    the words I am so afraid of believing in
    the ones that I am afraid to speak.
    Only then will I know when the right time is
    Each day developes into something new
    A stronger bond between me and you
    and I take it all in, for whatever it could be worth.
    I take it and run to the very end of the earth, waiting for you to catch me.
    Waiting for you to say what I want to say to you.
    test
  2. babyangel17

    babyangel17 New Member

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    that real was real sweet i felt that too, i liked how u put the wording n shit nice peice
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  3. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    this was dope

    like a desperate plea to a lost lover...reminds me of a poem i wrote a couple days ago

    keep up the good work
    test
  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Yea seemed like a plea, really nice and sweet. very emotional... I like that


    Stay Up, Much Love, peace
    test
  5. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    lol. You love me. and it's recipricol. If you show it I'll know it. Cause actions speak louder. I really like your poetry. write some more. later.
    test
  6. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    yo that was hot, you still dont know who this is do you?!! haha you will never know!!! hahah
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  7. KB Beats

    KB Beats New Member

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    sweet man, a nice love poem with imagery that doesnt sound too cliche
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  8. TheEntity

    TheEntity New Member

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    I like this post real innovative keep up the good work
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  9. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    Well i THINK THAT I KNOW WHO IT IS.

    Maybe you can call me and tell me since you seem to know my number.
    To everyone else, thanks for peepin.

    much luv
    test
  10. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thats kool.....i like the expression and stuff
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  11. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    For being written quickly I think it was done very well. When you get closure on this situation, it would be really cool to bring back little things from these poems that all just blend together to tell the story of the persuit that you are in. I am very intrigued by the way you write.

    ^Luv^
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  12. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    I tend not to like pieces that end to soon, but this one was i really liked. You have a nice smoothed out style. Good to see you aaround


    one luv
    test
  13. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    Your heart is received with open arms
    And I'm not just trying to feed you my barstool charms

    Go ahead and say what it is that you want
    I'll say it too and we'll both get what we want

    You don't ever have to bite your tongue around me
    I'm probably the only one who will know what you mean

    And you don't have to worry about anything else
    Im gonna be yours until snow covers the hells

    If you feel like you want to let loose and cry
    I will hold you in my arms to strengthen our ties

    And anything that you know that will make you afraid
    Will vanish along with the feeling that made
    you almost too scared, but you felt me and stayed
    So I know I got the answer to all
    those prayers that I prayed
    lol
    Come walk with me
    In this lovers parade
    And lay by my side under this oak trees sweet shade
    Every other man you've known will wish that he stayed

    because they didn't know about the treasure they had
    You make me feel so amazingly glad

    I'll lay with you till all the seas turn to dust
    and everyone forgets all the things that they fussed
    and each one of us is still trying to know
    what you and I found and are jealous to show

    I can't wait to see you again
    that's the end of this poem
    I can't even pretend. lol

    ttyl.
    test
  14. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    You are so amazing to me and I thank you from the bottom of my heart for being here with me.

    Thanks everyone for reading this, and giving me your replies, if anyone ever wants to know who I write about it is CLARKSVEGAS_DAN, In case someone hasn't guessed yet.

    much luv
    test
  15. Subconcious

    Subconcious CiPrIoLa DyNaStY

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    Awww I just wanted to read your poem again and I got to see this little romantic tryst going on.....How cute...
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  16. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    I agree this is very sweet and good poetry. ill keep reading.
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  17. Thaumaturge

    Thaumaturge New Member

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    nice, this was coo, i liked how u stressed the "sweetness" in it as the 19031234 people above me said

    it was coo tho
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  18. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Sometimes feelings are best expressed when let loose without time to stop and think of putting them into words, when they just come out naturally is when they are most sincere, and you did an excellent job of portraying your feelings in this piece.

    Nice work

    Peace
    test
  19. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    Thanks everyone for peepin this drop. I really appreciate it.
    I'll be around.
    much luv
    test
  20. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    lol, same here
    test
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