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  1. DemiGod

    DemiGod Peef Rimgar

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    Just fuckin around tryna get my groove back


    The clock ticks slow, time seeps into madness,
    It's found a home with no phone or an address,
    Who knows what was the cause of this sickness,
    Thoughts, dreams, and memories melt into a single liquid,
    Pour it into the storm to see what's formed,
    Does mixing mental faculties create a vision of the norm,
    The truth's shadowed by the light of the dark,
    There's no end or start to the matters of the heart,
    How many wrongs until it equals right,
    Bolted to the floor with hopes taking flight,
    Blind eyes see nothing but the conclusion,
    The knife comes quick to cut loose any protrusion,
    If the truth hurts, then the lies scar,
    The road is open but to broken for it to go far,
    So the end nears, but it's all fair,
    The tunnel with the light at the end is all the world shares.
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  2. Temujin the One

    Temujin the One New Member

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  3. DemiGod

    DemiGod Peef Rimgar

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    lol fail.
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  4. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    diggin in. nice rhyme schemes. opening four lines really drew my attention in and the rest kept me interested. good job.

    should sign up into the RSTL if you're looking to work on your game
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  5. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    pretty decent verse here. some multies and internals would spice this verse up right nice bruh. still pretty good shit.



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  6. DemiGod

    DemiGod Peef Rimgar

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    Preciate the feedback....like I said it was just to get back into the swing of things
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