[VOTE][Week 2] Cigma(0-1) vs nO gOoD!(0-1)

Discussion in 'The Rapmusic Storytelling/Topical League' started by Tacky Jones, Aug 30, 2010.

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  2. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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    Thoughts in perspective
    travel the
    space between two worlds.
    Of the infinite
    Nature bore
    an innocent being.

    A short night wakes me
    from a dream
    that seemed so long ago.
    One leaf lets go
    then another
    takes the wind.
    What do you understand?
    One sound
    the voice of Autumn.

    Not even for a moment
    do things stand still
    witness color in trees.
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  3. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    hell yeah Cigma, expect a top notch verse from me this week, I'm about 30 lines in.

    its gonna be sick bro. good luck

    The picture added here only cause it was cool as fuck looking. I went further too and did a real quick audio version too.

    listen while you read. Enjoy fellas.. the track is still in rough stage but you can at least listen. I'll master it up later.
    SoundClick artist: Dove Dozer - Dove Dozer, new school, positive vibes.


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    Locked in the trunk..


    I have a story to tell.


    To keep it in is toxic...


    I feel sick to think about it,


    so your the one I'll talk with...
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    20 August 1976

    I awoke in hell..
    I'll tell you of the darkest plot...

    no fire - brimstone,
    I was in the parking lot...

    to start's the hard part...
    can't take a breath, coughin...

    the day was cold and dark,
    I thought of death often...

    cherishing every breath,
    I seemed cautious...

    whoever put me here is sick,
    I don't mean nauseous...

    a total surprise,
    I didn't know the disquise

    was gonna hit me like a freight train,
    you'll notice the size...

    of the ride in the picture.
    it looks deceiving...

    the trunk's actually bigger,
    this aint a book I'm reading...

    it was real life then,
    I was shook and bleeding...

    the devil played a part,
    I hate the crooked heathen...

    the engine seemed alive,
    like it would have to breathe...

    I swear it had a pulse,
    and it's blood was gasoline...

    it had me in it's clutches..
    with no way to escape...

    I was on my way to hell,
    but had to wait at the gate...

    every minute seemed eternity,
    with the motor runnin...

    like I'm gonna die,
    and now I know it's commin...

    I'm shiverin cold,
    I can feel the goosebumps...

    as we swerve down the road,
    I'm prayin for a loose trunk...

    the wind was howling...
    just like the devil's dog...

    we race down darkness
    in a heavy fog...

    I can't think straight,
    I saw a blink, he hit the brakes...

    if he pops the trunk
    then I'm fit to escape...

    I can't even think,
    how long I've been trapped....

    soon enough it all changed,
    weight on the the gas...

    it was dark here,
    but the speed was blinding...

    it didn't take long,
    I heard the cops and sirens...

    whats it gonna take,
    to stop this violence...

    we need to pull together
    to stop the tyrants...

    don't think this is fake,
    written script...

    I was in the car,
    when it flipped in the ditch...

    when I came to,
    tried to move, was afraid to...

    ain't the same dude,
    who can I put the blame to...

    later found out,
    I was lucky to survive...

    I should live stress free
    and be alive..

    my freedom and my life,
    no one can take from me...

    Because the man that I escaped,
    was Ted Bundy...
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  4. Mad OrphaN

    Mad OrphaN New Member

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    This was easy to battle,Cigma didnt even try.

    Cigma-you obviously went for quality over quantity.your piece read like a memoir rather than a story.It was poetic yes but not enough for a win,as the readers actually want a story.You couldve done a trillion things with that pic you used.

    NG-Good topic and story.Your flow was easy and to the point.I really got involved in the story until the twist at the end.Dope all around.

    Vote-NG
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  5. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    Cigma - I actually enjoyed this verse. It had a very poetic vibe to it and i think that it had so much potential to be stellar. The wording was nice, the picture fit it nicely. The only downfall this was the fact that it was so short. It didn't have enough time to really develop enough and it put a limit on how awesome this could have been. Still i enjoyed it. Nicely done


    Fave Line -
    "Not even for a moment
    do things stand still
    witness color in trees."

    NG - Excellent work her and a major step up from last weeks performance. The rhyming and flow were on point and really hit hard. I enjoyed the stroy really well which painted a nice picture for me. It wasn't as in depth as i would've liked but this didn't need it. I think that you pick up from where you left off last time you were in the league. Nicely done.

    Fave Line -
    "I awoke in hell..
    I'll tell you of the darkest plot...

    no fire - brimstone,
    I was in the parking lot..."

    Overall a good match up and i believe that Cigma's verse had soo much potential but was too short. In the end, NG won this with a more in depth and lyrical sound story. nicely done guys


    Vote - NG
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  6. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    Cigma - your verses are very poetic. the imagery is usually really good. had this one been longer i think this could have been a great verse. the problem with your verses though, is this is a rap league, not a poetry league. you need to incorporate more rap aspects into your verse. a big part of how i judge verses is off rhymes and the flow. which is missing from your verses.

    NG - nice story, nice twist. the ending really made the whole verse clear. a very interesting take on the picture. i also like the way you formatted the verse. made it easy to read. the flow was good. i know how much that means to you lol. lyrically was cool too. a good ass drop

    vote- NG
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  7. Murderous Keys

    Murderous Keys All's well that ends

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    *cigma - nice poetic verse but it just wasnt a topic battle gem nice open mic but it just left me dry but the slow and rhyme scheme was nice just not enough depth

    NG- nice verse. great story which u stayed on point along with the rhyme. very tough verse to beat, good job bro.

    vote n to the g
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  8. Cigma

    Cigma Maxwell's Demon

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  9. Scrolls-Oracle of Omen

    Scrolls-Oracle of Omen *DBS*--*A.B.C*

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    Cigma..nice poetic peice..Jus needs to be longer homie. Stay on it longer next wek bro.

    Ng..good verse man. Clean audio too. U sound like my homie. Good story all the way threw. Lyrics and rhymes were nice.

    Vote...Ng
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  10. RICO

    RICO my daughter right there

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    Ng.

    its crazy how you break your bars down very easy to read. short to the point lines but good word choice so you get the point across without strecthing the lines...great detail, and the ending was ina word perfect.

    Cig.

    i liked it. matter a fact i loved it. very peaceful and poetic, worked great for that picture, i think i know exactly what you were thinking....

    for me vote- cig.

    ng was so well written, but i just enjoyed his more. barley. i litterally have nothing bad to say about ngs....
    great work guys.
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  11. Calibre

    Calibre Peoples Champ

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    Vote - no good
    I enjoyed reading both verse here, and to be honest, it would have been a lot closer providing cigma had some more lines, cigma has always been seeming to produce got stuff, I just want to see longer stories from you cig. . No good, I know you, you're a vet in this shit, story was very much on point from top to bottom, description was there, flow was there, story was epic. Loved your shit my nicca
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  12. Shadow

    Shadow Kotaro's Master

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    NG up 6-1
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