Venomous X-vs.-Gsus

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  1. VenomousX

    VenomousX New Member

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    Venomous X-vs.-Gsus


    8 Bars.
    no flips
    no hater votes
    first to 3 votes (or 2-0 WINS)
    72 hours to reply



    GEEEZZZZZZ…UP nahh forget it. I’m bringing him down//
    Lyrical assassin crucifying him and givin’ him the thorny crown//

    Call the disciples for back up you might have a way with words//
    But you’re an illiterate chump who can’t properly pronounce his verbs//

    I can’t bear to read your lines they’re making my eyes ache//
    Anything you type is trash so battling is a big mistake//

    Are you suppose to be trying shoot man I can’t tell//
    but can give you some soundly advice “LEARN TO SPELL”//

    I should have called you “Gus” cause the name sounds right//
    He might seem nice in the day but he’s wack once it’s midnight//

    You might have a way with words but I’m a craftsman with ‘em//
    you know what you do yet your too incompetent to even get ‘em//

    I shouldn’t have to do this because all your doing is wasting valuable time//
    Blood might be thicker that water but yours rhymes aren’t better than mine//

    Always having ya 12 boys with you backing you up until I nail you to the cross//

    You won’t have 3 days to combat this so just chuck this one as a loss//

    Venomous X
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  2. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    Listen...

    Ima bruiser, the fights fixed, ya verse Don King, promotin a loser...
    See Venomous career done seen more upsets, than a baller in Magic City and hooters/

    Every shots a low blow, ya bitch like a squirrel going for the nut...
    Fuck playin chicken, my fist a mack truck, sometimes u gotta know when to duck/

    Venomous pussy, I'd force feed em x-lax and he still wouldnt do shit...
    But the way I fight...
    Ya eyes'll be glued to my fist, like it was a pervert watchin a new flick/

    Man, I just looked at the pro, and ya'll got me battlin Fez from the 70's show...
    I mean what the fuck, I shouldnt even have to say no mo/

    When u spit, I smell the scent of butt, ya armpits poisoned, Im dying from Venom's musk...
    plus he like the feel of dick against his guts/

    This a handicap match, change the odds up, ten to what-...
    EVER, u wanna put on it, a loaded gun in his possession...
    is like the Pope's dick in hand, he wont even a-tempt to bust/
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  3. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    venomous x- iah, i thought you made the rules, you said "no flips".. whats up with the Crucifixion & crown of thorns reference then? its evident in your verse structure, that your not really comprehending everything your saying or doing. you have good potential but some of the structures of your rhymes were mediocre.

    bars wasted like this really hurt your arguement-
    "I should have called you “Gus” cause the name sounds right//
    He might seem nice in the day but he’s wack once it’s midnight//"

    sounds like your tryna flip his name.. and the rhyme seemed forced the punch was very basic and lacking.. you basically said. 'during the day gsus might be tight, but he's wack at midnight'.... that dont impress me at all

    Gsus-wow your sturctured THIS verse better then the previous ones i seen. i seen you really stuck to the rules and that i compliment you for. and when you did flip his name on one occasion it was so slick and subliminal i didnt catch it at first
    "Venomous pussy, I'd force feed em x-lax and he still wouldnt do shit...
    But the way I fight..."
    punches were better polished and your made more damage against your opponent in this verse.

    vote-Gsus
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  4. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    1-0 uppin for more votes
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  5. VenomousX

    VenomousX New Member

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    how could i have flipped anything in this verse if i was the first one to spit?
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  6. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    Lol...he's new, he probably thought flip meant playing off my name and all that
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  7. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    thats exactly what i thought it meant.

    my bad.
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  8. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    uppin for more votes
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  9. bnasty510

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    ven...


    GEEEZZZZZZ…UP nahh forget it. I’m bringing him down//
    Lyrical assassin crucifying him and givin’ him the thorny crown//

    weak

    Call the disciples for back up you might have a way with words//
    But you’re an illiterate chump who can’t properly pronounce his verbs//

    wack

    I can’t bear to read your lines they’re making my eyes ache//
    Anything you type is trash so battling is a big mistake//

    weak

    Are you suppose to be trying shoot man I can’t tell//
    but can give you some soundly advice “LEARN TO SPELL”//

    wack

    I should have called you “Gus” cause the name sounds right//
    He might seem nice in the day but he’s wack once it’s midnight//

    wack

    You might have a way with words but I’m a craftsman with ‘em//
    you know what you do yet your too incompetent to even get ‘em//

    ehh

    I shouldn’t have to do this because all your doing is wasting valuable time//
    Blood might be thicker that water but yours rhymes aren’t better than mine//

    Always having ya 12 boys with you backing you up until I nail you to the cross//
    You won’t have 3 days to combat this so just chuck this one as a loss//

    ok

    weak punches overall...poor rhymin.. just being real

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    Listen...

    Ima bruiser, the fights fixed, ya verse Don King, promotin a loser...
    See Venomous career done seen more upsets, than a baller in Magic City and hooters/

    Every shots a low blow, ya bitch like a squirrel going for the nut...
    Fuck playin chicken, my fist a mack truck, sometimes u gotta know when to duck/

    Venomous pussy, I'd force feed em x-lax and he still wouldnt do shit...
    But the way I fight...
    Ya eyes'll be glued to my fist, like it was a pervert watchin a new flick/

    koo this took it for me

    Man, I just looked at the pro, and ya'll got me battlin Fez from the 70's show...
    I mean what the fuck, I shouldnt even have to say no mo/

    wack

    When u spit, I smell the scent of butt, ya armpits poisoned, Im dying from Venom's musk...
    plus he like the feel of dick against his guts/

    weak

    This a handicap match, change the odds up, ten to what-...
    EVER, u wanna put on it, a loaded gun in his possession...

    garbage

    opener was ok



    vote gsus haD the better line
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  10. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    2-0 uppin for more votes...lets hurry up and get this over...so many views and no votes
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  11. str8rage

    str8rage New Member

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    doubt my vote will count but

    1st verse garbage , either it was pre-written or personals were hm not noticeable

    2nd verse , better , fillers , nothing hitting too hard

    only quotable is a negative one

    "Ya eyes'll be glued to my fist, like it was a pervert watchin a new flick/"

    ^ wouldnt it be opposite ? why would a perv cover his eyes man his eyes fkn glowing with envy

    idk , count the vote or not

    edit : oh ya forgot to say voted Gsus
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  12. Gsus

    Gsus aka Wordz bka G. Legit

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    his eyes glued to my fist like dude eyes glued to the TV....
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  13. str8rage

    str8rage New Member

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    oh LOLs misread
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  14. VenomousX

    VenomousX New Member

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    oh.....

    anywho nice battle Gsus..
    .told you i was rusty.
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  15. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    this was a goood battle from both yawl!
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