Untitled #4

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  1. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    Gemini got me all rev'd up reading her stuff so I gotta drop one more from the collect :p... here it is. This is from my group that I play to call "Untitled" cause they are very very abstract and deep poems. So why title them???



    Rain clouds carry the vast knowledge of oceans
    Yet all we gather are the drops we feel
    Why become drenched in knowledge when you can settle for sprinkled
    You state you are open yes
    But define you how open you really are
    How does the cat fit under the fence?
    Covered in false information that is only a show
    Speaking knowledge to those who lacking knowledge
    Do you speak to a brick wall when you want to engage
    Give people time and you can only give them the world
    Take time away and all you have left is nothing
    How smart is a dead man?
    Where do you go when you nothing to do and you rest your mind
    A mind is a terrible thing to waste so why do we do it every second
    For an Iceberg is instilled in those that remain cool
    Losing sight and focus cause loss in mass
    You can speak weighted words that lack mass
    Density is the language of few
    To dance without a chute on the clouds is crazy
    To dance with the devil is crazy
    To live a life without time only to melt away is crazy
    test
  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    "Rain clouds carry the vast knowledge of oceans"

    great ass line right there. imagery was dope. Deep piece here. Type of shit you read that makes u think all day...thanks

    one luv
    test
  3. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    very nice..was a thinking piece...every line had something to think about. i was impressed.
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  4. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    *looks around*..hmm...

    ...indeed, i dig this...

    ...being somewhat of an 'abstract' writer meself (and person in general)...i appreciated this most definetly. I didn't dig into it to find any real meaning other than my own. It was a loose one that was here and there..

    ...to me it was about patience...sitting back and taking it all in...about how people can overlook so many things...deception..

    ...that amongst other things...

    ..resp...
    test
  5. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    i dont think we like each other... cause your an ass, but, ive always liked to read yo work... nice.
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  6. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    Very Nice Wordplay And Imagery U Displayed....i Hope U Drop More Pieces...u Mos Def Got Skills.....it Had Me Thinkin Of How People Love To Stand And Watch Stragedies And Then Go Away Feeling Sad Later.....very Good Drop...

    ~one Love~
    test
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