u need to learn ur lesson...

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  1. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    You need to learn your lesson...
    if your mom wont teach you.
    i will.
    you dont seem to understand
    that this isnt how life goes
    you cant sit and fuck around,
    you gotta little boy on the way...
    and i know you wanna be
    the only dad in his life...
    if you dont get a job
    and if you dont stop the drugs
    it WILL be over...
    im not gonna keep your kid from you
    but im not gonna support your fucking habbits
    your only 17...your just a little boy
    but boy.....you need to grow some fucking balls
    youre old enough to have sex,
    and your old enough to do drugs...
    but yet...not old enough to be a dad?
    you say you've never had a dad
    you dont know how to be one right?
    well fuck you
    am i gonna be the mom and the dad?
    just cause you didnt have one
    doesnt mean your boy doesnt get one...
    so this is it...
    no more chances, no more games
    your sons life is on the line
    and sadly to say, so is mine...
    no more drugs, and no more parties...
    no more fucking lies either
    one more fuck up and babe its over.


    hey guys...this is about me and my boyfriend, as you probably know, im pregnant, (just found out its a boy yay!!) and my mans not steppin up to the plate...thanks for reading and please reply
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  2. Nasty__Ness

    Nasty__Ness The Queen of Topicals

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    honestly... I am not surprised. This is very common with younger (teenage) men. Unfortunately it will fall on ya.. and ya have to be the strong one. It's not fair... but it's reality. And when he grows up it may be too late.

    Don't think I am hating... I have a son of my own.... but ya both got yaself inthis position... and carrying a child (with a good mother to be) makes ya unable to do all the things ya want to do, use to do, or see what others are.

    Good luck through ya pregnancy... and I hope all works out for the best...

    and nice piece.
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  3. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    oh i know we got in this on our own, but we both had sex...and i know since im the one preg. i already got that bond with the baby...but its like i've told the dad sooooo many times you gotta stop, i wont let you see your kid if your high and i wont trust you with your kid if you keep lyin to me know...hes not changin tho....
    but thanks for the reply :)
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  4. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    them first 3 lines made me laugh. But i really dont know what to tell you, other than get ya man on the good foot and take care of his business. Keep ya head up

    one luv
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  5. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    lol, i say "if your mom wont teach you i will" because his mom is one of the ones givin him money to go get drugs and things like that...so if his mom wont tell him to stop and grow up, i will :)
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  6. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    dont listen to this fools advice...lol...j/k

    this was a nice piece....i understand where u comin from...just keep your head up and get that cat in line
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  7. MzLashay

    MzLashay Livin'

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    Shit its like i repeat these lines every dammn day

    "if you dont get a job
    and if you dont stop the drugs
    it WILL be over..."

    more like a venting piece and you need to get some thangs off ya chest
    Very good and like my moms say
    If he cant be a father or atleast try to be then you just need to let it go because he may never be ready and you dont need to waste precious time tryin to make him something he will never be....take care i hope everythings goin ok wit u and the baby
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  8. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    ya i know what ya mean, its like i say those lines almost everyday..but yet im never able to just let go...fuck, lifes hard but then again...no one said itd be easy...
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  9. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Ya im unloved...
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  10. Ntrikit

    Ntrikit Please stop freeposting.

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    kids....having kids

    *Shakes Head*
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  11. j$crILLa

    j$crILLa ~$crillVille~

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    "youre old enough to have sex,
    and your old enough to do drugs...
    but yet...not old enough to be a dad?
    you say you've never had a dad
    you dont know how to be one right?
    well fuck you
    am i gonna be the mom and the dad?
    just cause you didnt have one
    doesnt mean your boy doesnt get one..."

    damn girl, now that was some real ass shit..... keep writin
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  12. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    i love your poetry.. i kind of dont come to the realm much no more but when i saw this i jus had to read it.. its really good emotion but paint a picture wit words.. more description.. more description brings more emotion than the blatantly obvious.. its not really a critique jus some advice whichll help you elevate.. dont get me wrong its really pretty vivid what you say but doesnt mean you cant get better.. beautiful piece.. really dont take my comment the wrong way i was tryin to say this as nice as possible.. its really a beautiful piece tho..
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  13. iceheart

    iceheart The Frozen Poet

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    as usual, another beautiful piece. your boyfriend needs to grow a backbone. i love your work. it is simply amazing. thank you for the inspiration

    keep writing
    peace
    iceheart
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  14. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Note im the dad....
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  15. Lyrisic

    Lyrisic New Member

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    Definately a venting piece...but a damn good one at that...lol...at first it started off as if it were a mother scolding her child...( i knew it wasn't, just had that kind of tone)...but after about 6 or 7 lines into it, it really started to sound like almost an angered plea.....great piece, enjoyed reading it...
    LP
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  16. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    to me, poems written based on the truth have the strongest meanings... this was a powerful poem, made me wanna cry really because its terrible when men wanna go back to being boys and not accepting resposibility... ::sigh:: nice poem.
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  17. keyarag

    keyarag Gone But Not Forgotten

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    I like this!!! I actually love this......as far as yo man.......I already told you what to do with him!!!
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  18. messiyah

    messiyah Im Not God You Dickhead

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  19. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Its bad that people never take the time and watch the world. Its like they dont know what theyve got until its gone, and he wont know what hes got until your gone. No excuses can make up for not being a man. He might have to be one before he is ready, but he is going to have to do so...Good poem, very informative, and it brings to light the reality that few people refuse to look at. Every man is born a king, but not every boy is born a man...Thats what I got outta this piece...keep it up...and good luck...
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  20. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    And ohh yeah, I have to agree with Ntrikit on this one...Kids having kids...::Shaking head::...
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