Two letter poem.

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  1. nom berryman.

    nom berryman. the great poet.

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    Dear Home,

    The windows have been breaking with alarming regularity
    While the wind hides in the trees

    I think I'm scared of the dark.

    Now the dusk creeps into my room
    With a whimper and a thud and a whisper
    Singing the approaching day is a sore toothed bear.

    Please come save me
    The neighbours can hear what I'm thinking
    And they aren't happy.

    The front door, all cheap hinges and plywood
    Falls apart when the bullies knock
    They rat a tat tat to make their matches.

    Dear Child,

    The foundations here are stronger than you think
    And the wind whistling is keeping tune
    With the melody of your footsteps.

    The sky isn't falling
    This roof isn't made from bread
    These sandbags hold cement

    The windows are scratched messages
    That come out in the cold, so
    Just keep breathing, friend.

    When the dawn yawns its morning hellos
    Have the coffee and morning paper ready

    Circle the job adverts.
    test
  2. The Grimace

    The Grimace Jeff Goldblum

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    Nice imagery. wasnt bad tbh. but you kind of ended on a low point, like i get it, but id rather get something else. not tryna be an asshole either, im just saying the "denouement" needs a different ending.

    this reminds me of a short story this toronto writing did about a dumpling. same kind of perspective, but in reverse
    test
  3. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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