Two Angels

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  1. MC Radical

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    A question comes up
    How life can be fair?
    What best in ones life
    God takes and nothing’s there.
    There were two lives,
    Pure like angels,
    Pure dreams.
    Dreams taken by someone,
    Someone who doesn’t dream.
    Doesn’t care for life.
    Everything was taken,
    In a blink,
    In an instance.
    Everything sacred.
    All of a sudden nothing is of care.
    This isn’t right,
    Right for life to end.
    The memories of Angels are with me my friend.
    Now lives aren’t full,
    Two lives not full filled.
    I’m trying to find words,
    But my lips are sealed.
    Tears in my eyes,
    I can’t hold on anymore.
    Why were the two lives taken?
    Stop this pain! No More!
    test
  2. UnknownLady

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    I am upping this piece. Why didn't anyone reply to this. It is beautiul and it is really getting slept on. I just thought I should tell u that I was digging this piece a lot. Great job. Hope others enjoy this as I did.
    Upping

    I am out
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  3. MC Radical

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    Thank You Very Much!
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  4. Infonation

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    Yo this was really good. I'm surprised that no one is reading this. The title of the piece caught my eye, and the piece itself, caught my mind. Nice piece. Uppin this fo the people to see.

    ^One
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  5. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    this was good...glad i didn't miss this one..really felt it..interesting...tho i felt it could've ended it a bit better..but it doesn't hurt that it ended with pure emotion either. good job.
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  6. varentao

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    This had the potential to be a real deep exploring piece about how unfair reality can be...and how insane it can seem that people believe in god..but ended up being qaint...

    ..which isn't a bad thing. I liked it being 'qaint'. It had a simple truth to it. You know, it was just there. Letting rip emotions without any real subteleties, just telling it straight. Echoing the question 'why?' throughout the piece. Then rounding it off in a way befitting for the piece i felt by not giving an answer, but just telling it to stop. In a pleading like way...

    ...resp...
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  7. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    this was a nice poem... i can see it being a bit longer though, going more into how it seems God isnt there... and i can see it turning around too... nice poem.
    test
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