turn back the hands of Morris Day

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  1. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    I mean, "The Time", my bad.

    ::Keystyle::

    I keep blockin' open hand pimp slaps from time
    Waiting for a moment to be mine and I
    Decide then that I don't want to live another second
    Just that one forever when time is too tired
    To take it's toll on me.
    If I could turn back the hands of time woefully
    I'd hopelessly enjoy the respite from the abuse
    Destined to be obtuse
    Resonant is the accused
    Of battery, infinitely powered by irony
    I stand now on the reef of the ocean
    Between the young and the older
    But way before golden
    And I notice a few abnormalities
    I
    Can't move like I used to, windmills hurt
    And my knees are quickly loosing their faith in me.
    I don't remember things I used to want to forget
    And can't forget things I never wanted to know in the first place
    I no longer have faith in being first in the race
    You know, that feeling every kid has that
    They are special?
    I begin to wonder, what has "time" done to me
    to make me melt into the pot
    Yelling for it to stop
    Because I now can't tell the difference
    Between me and the throng.
    I tried too long
    To deny being young
    And now
    Time has made me live to regret it.
    Youth is gone and I didn't live to forget it.

    If I could turn back the hands of time,
    I might go back to when I first learned to rhyme
    Not because of the enjoyment of poetry
    But it was the same time I tried to kill myself
    And it's annoying me
    Why
    Couldn't
    I
    Just
    Kill

    Time?

    I tried to turn back the hands of time
    But realized time is me.
    My hands pinned back to the wood
    Back as it should
    Crucified by the insanity
    That time has made of me.

    And when I realized
    Time is me
    It became sad to see
    That time


    Really never "was" in the first place,
    and hence

    This poem has been written anonymously
    By hands that have yet to exist...
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  2. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    This poem has been written anonymously
    By hands that have yet to exist...

    Lovely simply lovely... I get the feel that it's saying the older man who will be saying that doesn't exist yet.


    I
    Can't move like I used to, windmills hurt
    And my knees are quickly loosing their faith in me.
    I don't remember things I used to want to forget
    And can't forget things I never wanted to know in the first place
    I no longer have faith in being first in the race
    You know, that feeling every kid has that
    They are special?
    I begin to wonder, what has "time" done to me
    to make me melt into the pot
    Yelling for it to stop
    Because I now can't tell the difference
    Between me and the throng.
    I tried too long
    To deny being young
    And now
    Time has made me live to regret it.
    Youth is gone and I didn't live to forget it.



    All of that I'm loving da most ALL of it. Good shit hot yet true and real.
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    damn and this was a keystyle? This was a very smart piece, and creative. You took the topic and ran with it like it was nothing, you make this shit look so easy....

    "If I could turn back the hands of time,
    I might go back to when I first learned to rhyme
    Not because of the enjoyment of poetry
    But it was the same time I tried to kill myself
    And it's annoying me
    Why
    Couldn't
    I
    Just
    Kill

    Time?"

    that part stood out the most to me, great job

    "This poem has been written anonymously
    By hands that have yet to exist..."

    perfect ending

    one luv
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  4. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    thanks for the love y'all.
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  5. Ntrikit

    Ntrikit Please stop freeposting.

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    I loved this part.
    See, I'm always talkin to people and explaining to them that life is a series of moments. It's not about who you was yesterday, who you'll be tomorrow or even who you are today.

    Jesus taught Man:
    "Unless you become like children you shall never enter the Kingdom of Heaven" and "The Kingdom of Heaven is not some far off place to be found. You cannot say, here it is or there it is because the Kingdom of Heaven is Within."

    If you consider an Infant. They do not plan for tomorrow, they don't regret yesterday. They live in the moment. They laugh, cry, and see the beauty of the life in front of them. If you take a child outside they will sit and stare at leaves or pick up a flower and just look at it in a trance. They're ONE with God. They are pure. They don't worry about death...the concept hasn't even been born in them. They don't question the meaning of life....They're living it. They don't search for God, God's in them.

    Alot of older people look back alot. If you talk to anybody 40 and over you'll hear alot of "Back In The Day" stories where they remember little incidents and if you watch them close you'll see this smile come over them and a light in their eyes that comes straight from their soul. What if instead of just having the memory people would realize those moments are right before them ALL day long and take it all in. A moment can last in total 2 seconds and still bring you an eternity of happiness if you embrace it.

    But yea...Sorry didn't mean to write a book.
    That part just got me thinkin.
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  6. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Now why can't you be like this all the time? Sensible and intelligent? We ain't gotta agree, just don't wild out.
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  7. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    That was real slick right there...I like how you somewhat made yourself Time's incarnate...real clever. I have somthing almost kinda similar, but not nearly as good or as in depth as this. i give that snaps.
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  8. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    another masterpiece by the soultan... beautiful the whole way thru but i loved this part:

    "If I could turn back the hands of time,
    I might go back to when I first learned to rhyme
    Not because of the enjoyment of poetry
    But it was the same time I tried to kill myself
    And it's annoying me
    Why
    Couldn't
    I
    Just
    Kill

    Time?"


    i think someone else already quoted this but this struck me str8 in the heart because it was the same way with me when i started writing poetry... ::sigh:: wonderful poem as always.
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  9. Ntrikit

    Ntrikit Please stop freeposting.

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    LoL

    Was you at 21?
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  10. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Yeah. I was not very different at 21 than I am now.
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  11. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    How do ya mean?
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  12. Kareem

    Kareem Still Ballin

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    WTF? is this gay shit??ma toilet got a betta flow ya mindfuckin pussy ass nerd urkel
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  13. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    i hate the ending too....or maybe its jealousy rearing its ugly head???

    j/k

    why the helll cant i come up with shit like that.

    i want a true fuckin answer man!!!!
    VVVVV

    how much time did you spend on this piece cause there just is something that im missing with my stuff.

    good all around piece.

    i read it too fast tho.

    i skipped to the ending

    you are time* yada yada

    and the type of ending i would like to have for my own poetry is in your post.

    YOURE KILLIN ME MAAAAAN!!!!

    lol

    good piece and stay up!

    -----------------------------------
    One love
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  14. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    LOL

    I just stare at the topic or picture at hand in the writer's challenge, read what others have read, and just try to find what hasn't been said. I try to look through the topic instead of at it.
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  15. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    upping for Feme Sole to see...
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  16. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    up........im going to read this after work tomorrow soultan
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  17. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    theres never a single line wasted in your poems......no "filler" lines i mean.....it all just. . .one great line after another.......lots and lots of lines stuck out to me....
    i liked that whole thing, and the ending DAMN......you always amaze me...always

    (sorry it took so long, i may be slow sometimes but i dont forget entirely) :) :)
    ttys
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  18. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    glad i didn't miss this piece, it was beautifully written.

    I don't remember things I used to want to forget
    And can't forget things I never wanted to know in the first place


    those words hit yah....nice
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  19. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    :) Thanks you guys. I don't consider a piece any good unless you two say so...
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  20. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    LOL......im flattered.....unless youre being sarcastic, and in that case shut the hell up ;)

    :) good stuff soultan i just read again and i liked this part a lot

    "Decide then that I don't want to live another second
    Just that one forever when time is too tired
    To take it's toll on me."
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