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  1. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    you dont understand.
    im trying so hard not to call you right now
    i wanna call just to hear your voice
    and see if you actually wanna hear mine.
    or if your too "busy" to talk to me
    i cant help but cry
    when you say you wanna go home
    or go to your friends
    cause all i wanna do is have you by my side
    i bite my tounge every time
    you tell me you had some drinks and
    when you say you came home late
    just to stop an arguement
    im scared to ask you questions
    cause i dont wanna get yelled at
    for bein nosey or jealous
    which only makes me think more
    that your hiding somthing from me
    i dont like sitting at home,
    waiting, thinking, and crying
    wondering if you care enough to call
    but i guess you dont...
    cause my phones not ringing
    or what the hell your doing
    im begining to think i care too much
    you say that I bitch and cry
    till i get my way...
    but you...your the one
    who puts me through hell
    making me feel horrible
    till i do what you say
    you wanted to go out....
    i wanted to spend time with you
    i cried...cause i want you here with me
    you yell and throw things and make a big scene
    until i say fine, leave.
    then everythings great...like we didnt even fight
    you won..like always
    so go play your video game
    and drink your brandy
    all night long...
    i dont cry cause i want your pity
    or to try and make you stay
    im crying
    cause im sad...
    and your not here to hold me.


    yes yes...another one about my boyfriend...tell me what you think
    test
  2. MisterEThoughts

    MisterEThoughts MysteryOfUntoldTruth

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    wow wow yea this is very good and i feel this to the fullest i actually felt it tis before when i fought with my girlfriend my ex i say i had this problem some of it not all but close thanks.
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  3. reincarnation

    reincarnation New Member

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    nice conversation...thanks for taking my idea ...just kidding.....good job...you did good.
    I love when people talk...feels real...
    just like "remember us?" good good..
    keep it up.
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  4. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    its easier to write when i feel like the person is right infront of me
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  5. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    very heart felt peice i feel you on this sorry you are having trouble with your man , very nice emotional peice stay up
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  6. this was good bad and sad.
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  7. tk2oo3

    tk2oo3 New Member

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    thats exactly the way you should do it, first person.. it comes in stronger always an more emotional.. third person is weak unless the author is carefull not to make mistakes..

    anyways nice again.. i aint got shit to say like always..
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  8. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Very felt, emotion was strong, feel for ya...much love

    peace
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  9. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    Beautiful as usual....this one really hit home tho...it was almost as if i could feel every piece of your frustration....tight shit!!

    mad love
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  10. Jamez Xavier

    Jamez Xavier In House Producer for FTS

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    Leeeeave him..!!
    You don't need him....
    If he not treating you like the Princess you are, find somebody who will....

    Well written poem by the way....
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  11. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    thanks everyone for the replies
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  12. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    wow, i felt the emotion so much in this peice, really heartfelt...i love ur emotion in all of ur peices and this was especially strong...i have read all ur peices about ur boyfriend and well yeah, just dont sound like u having much fun...either way great peice and keep ur head up
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  13. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    ^^its not that......i just dont know how to write happy poems..so all i can write is about the bad stuff...
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  14. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    yeah thats your post of the other page, but yeah i understand that, happy and me dont see to go well together either...well good peice all the same
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  15. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    yes very heartfelt good poem
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  16. Rekar

    Rekar Old Glory

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    Sarah you need to talk to me.....cause this is all shit.....and im tired of it.....
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  17. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    this was on point and real...i respect that...very nice drop...
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  18. Shibaby

    Shibaby betcha dollar i can do it

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    giiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiirl if u dont get the hell outta my diary we gonna have to FIGHT!!! yooo i was reading the jawn n i almost started crying. i understand n know the feelinz behind this poem all too well. n i feel ya on the "all i can right is bad stuff" view too.....i used 2 have the same problem. thatz life shyt happens. just wipe ya ass n move on. again very very nice piece i loved it!!!!
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  19. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Well, when I read this one, it sounds like the last one you posted because its all pain...Sometimes, you need to take into your hands the will of something and someone greater than you and walk beyond what you have...anyway, good poem...
    test
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