Triumph ***New*** Kamikaze Lyricist Solo Track ***Hot ***Drop Links***

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  1. Verbatim

    Verbatim Mr Write

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    flow and scheme is ill....shit goes together fluid..the chorus is...so so..it has potential...just something bout the lyrics...doesnt seem rythmic feel me?..at least after the part when you said "faint like your moms by your coffin" or something like that...second verse is tight too.....pretty nice joints...I would see your name alot(when DZK was dissing you, lol) but I never bothered to listen to the disses or your tracks but you have some nice shit....Imma look out for your shit
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  2. Taiyamo Denku

    Taiyamo Denku W.A.S.T.E.L.A.N.D.S.

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    The beat is coo.. but i thought it would come in a hit more.. the beat is so soft , like the bass is soft doesn't really stand out.. your lyrics are alright.. flow and delivery is pretty polished. But the lyrics i think could be more creative. But the mixing.. i don;t know just your vocals way over power the beat. The chorus is alright,,.,, , but I would change the title of the song.. just makes me think of Wu Tang cause of the title. Like if your gonna call it Triumph cause of the hook Call it Triumph and songthing else, cause Triumph is just too Wu Tang you know. and work on the mixing of the beat and vocals... dats about it.. your got skill mos def.. Keep elevating family...

    -Denku
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  3. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    thanx for listenin .... upped
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  4. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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  5. E_Spangler

    E_Spangler GHOstBuStaH

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    returnin the fav-

    beats pretty dope, feelin it.....flow is pretty nice, relatively basic....diggin ur voice...lyrics are strate, nothin special imo....delivery is good, nice energy....im not feelin the hook at all...overall, this is a cool track...keep doin u...peace
    -EGON
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  6. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    thanx for listenin ....
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    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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  8. Aziaddict

    Aziaddict New Member

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    Sounds pretty good. but not really feeling that hook part. It just didnt sound good. the way you try to do what NAs did on ETHER. It didn't make much sense to me for u to spell it out. (know what i mean?)

    but anyways, verse were sick. patterns changes and i like that. not so boring through the song. it's a good listen.
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  9. DamoSport

    DamoSport There can be only 1

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  10. Highst

    Highst Captain Nutyness

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  11. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    its workin ... I'll hit those links right now ...
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  12. KaSe_MuNNy

    KaSe_MuNNy New Member

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    Pretty dope. I gotta agree with dude who said how you enunciating your words. It's good to be clear, but it doesnt seem as natural when you enunciate your words, that's just my personal opinion though. Nice shit though man, keep spittin
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  13. NoxOnline

    NoxOnline Producer/Rapper

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  14. Phoenix5891

    Phoenix5891 T.S.K.

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    Your Flow is nice on this...This hook is pretty weak IMO.....I think you need more emotion on this also or you need to do a low set of doubles to contrast with your voice...keep grinding
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  15. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    thanx for listenin ....
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  16. EturnaL -

    EturnaL - Gun Ru Homie

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    I used to be bothered by your voice's simularitie's to fokissed's.

    ...This is OK. I don't really like the way you use your voice on this song....makes you sound to young....

    Your always at least decent with the some of the word-play.

    ...but your whole style on this is like you had to much repeatetiveness and too much of that wierd voice your usin...your voice on the last time I peeped you was ALOT better.......

    .....This sounds too much like a fokissed song with that repetitiveness....

    just use that word play, and loose the fokissed delivery and your wayyy hotter than this.

    stay up kid,

    Capital E to the T
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  17. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    Yo I told you stay outta my threads you fuckin attention whore !!!
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  18. DJ Verze

    DJ Verze DJ Verze

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    beats sick on here. u got soem crazy rhymeso n here. nice use of multies. the hook was aight, sounded a lil corny, but it wasnt bad, good concept. overall a tight track
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  19. EturnaL -

    EturnaL - Gun Ru Homie

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    I ain't gonna rgue with you again like the old days....you had your chance to battle with me and walked away....and now we're cool because we are both just postin music online to sharpen each other and petty beef is wack.....

    point being: you are better than you were on this track. thats all.
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  20. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    I ran lol ...thanx for the feed DJ Verse...
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