Time To Listen

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  1. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    I keep bragging till i start, till when im done ...
    I promise if I say im smart, they'll think im dumb.
    I never say nuthin' about my gun ..
    I've never went on stage holding my nuts ..
    I'm tough, but I never showed a single muscle
    let em think they tougher as they bring their hustle
    they came for me high as a shuttle, surrounded like Custer
    I still left em cryin like a child wit a missing sucker
    but now its gettin' rougher, don't know why I even compete
    you can be deep, just not too deep, so your never complete
    they treat each and every artist like garbage, its obscene
    critiques put heat under ya feet till somebody busts teeth
    come see if you thinkin' you invincible ...
    shot clay targets since I was six, its a family ritual
    i make it look simple, but it took a while to get it true
    but forget about my potential, look at who is sendin' you
    glipse at you in your mirror, "killer"
    your just mad cuz you dont have mirror image spinners
    while mine spinnin like weed trimmers under my fenders
    everytime I drive by and your girl sees it, it kills her
    untill yer brave enough to admit it, I ain't trippin'
    if yer trippin' wishin' I would've put in better lyrics
    next time I'll include you all kinds of gimmics ... or ..
    I'll stick my diamond watch in ya face, and say its time to listen ..


    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1238097-what-gets-me-closer-my-dreams.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1237214-still-ventin-lettin-my-mind-breath-feel.html
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  2. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    ill shit man nice flow good multis but careful whos face you shovin a diamond watch in front of someone eventually gonna try an take it ha ha
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  3. dsp2k5

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    lol thanks man ... but the other wrist is six inches from death if they try lol ... they gonna come back wit a nub ...

    besides that, when they went to grab it ... its so bright, it will blind em lmfao
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  4. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    touche sir touche
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  5. cram oremor

    cram oremor New Member

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    Nice flow, hot vocab. You hit it wit dis one"spinnin like weed trimmers undwr my fenders"
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  6. dsp2k5

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    thanks for the feedback homie ... glad u liked it ...
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  7. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    whatsup d. nice drop, nice flow. the rhymes were nice. we need to collab sometime soon, homie
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    im down whenever pimp ... thx for the feedback
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  9. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    forgot what mixtape/beat i wrote this to ... thx
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  10. TACOMA253BRNRZD

    TACOMA253BRNRZD New Member

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    yup this shit was heat! very good.. favorite thing is the confidence u put forth very persausive
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  11. dsp2k5

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    Thanks for the feedback I appreciate it man. Yeah sometimes you just got to get into that sort of mindstate and maintain it.
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  12. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    YES! im glad to read this post. different angle that u'v touched so far from what ive read.. and i like it shows versitality... great concept.. easy read!
    for a critique and dont take this as a negative ok

    work on ur sentence structure u want to write it so the reader can easily distinguish
    the flow.

    expand ur view points, then it will be flawless..
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  13. dsp2k5

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    Thanks for the critiques ... gotta have em ... only.an idiot doesn't learn from its audience ... Thx again
    The best I wrote this too was really slow so there are some parts I wasn't happy about, but still got da job done.
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