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  1. miscreant

    miscreant 1996 was the shit

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    just something random i dropped over nas - memory lane

    i rap for listeners, listen up lyrics are blisterin
    i can't write it down on paper shits too hot like your sister and
    starts a blaze soon as ink leaves the pen,
    catholic believing in Christ dying Gods forgivin my sins*
    so when a thug meets his end
    another one of God's sons deceased again
    leaves behind family enemies and friends,
    it takes faith without sight the cycle of life
    following blindly just like, the disciples of Christ
    beware of Judas though,
    betrayed by the closest who would know?
    but on my life swear to God the truth is so
    twisted, sometimes you just gotta get lifted
    and give it up when you hear someone gifted,
    spitting words of wisdom fit for the bible
    writing gospels like Christs disciples
    for future youth to grow up and aspire to,
    lyrical scriptures painting a perfect picture
    like da vinci, flawless as the fucken mona lisa

    *first 4 bars, props to nas, caught the same flow, just to let u know
    test
  2. Poetic Concept

    Poetic Concept New Member

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    I think u could have tightened up the rhythmn scheme a little, im not sure if u did it to a beat or not, cuz sumtimes a change in beat makes the read seem uneasy mayb its more vocal...content was good tho

    spitting words of wisdom fit for the bible
    writing gospels like Christs disciples
    for future youth to grow up and aspire to,

    I think this was hott still could hev been flipped but nice
    test
  3. Artiphax

    Artiphax New Member

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    yea this was straight
    test
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