THOUGHTS--lpoet and Mind~$oul AIM collabo

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    -just some shit we did last night on AIM

    lpoet Mind~$oul

    Dead hopes and dreams run through my blood veins
    i wanna find greatness but i know i'm destined for minor things
    Destined for minor things it may seem, but
    i still wanna get away, i still wish i had an angel's wings

    i understand that life is like a neverending fight
    but i dont wanna fight no more
    Cause i drained all my energy, now i'm dying helplessly on all fours
    give me death...i dont want this anymore......
    sick of turning my back on the truth, but
    its so much easier to hide behind these doors
    doors that take me away from the pain i'm runnin from,
    doors that take me away to a place where i find open arms

    they call me the quiet storm....
    b/c theres rage in my heart but i refuse to change form
    Into a beast that lurks inside me,
    Craving for the day when me and God lock horns

    i've already given my soul....
    but i refuse to part my lips and repent
    for the sins i've commited..some call me a fool..
    but
    they dont understand
    the story in my eyes, the story of this man
    hundreds of people could suround me...but forever alone i will stand
    In the mist of misery, blood runnin out my wrist,
    as i clench my thirst of death in my hands?

    i thought i'd gotten off clean but the blood trail
    told all to well where i'd come from and where i wanted to be
    A place beyond the elements of the stars, moon, and sea...a place above me
    test
  2. pr0liphix

    pr0liphix one n only

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    this was tight y0 goodshit.
    test
  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Excellant creativity worked in with this piece. A normal topic, which works for a "Poetic Cypha", as you may call it. I thought this piece was a basic work of art between two different poets, although they come together to unleash their thoughts, which lay upon their shoulders. Nice way of coming at the reader, two poet cypha, nice piece. My blessings..
    test
  4. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    I Can In All Honestly Write That Only The Both Of You Could Of Pulled Something Like That Off, I Have Been Meaning To Reply For Some Time But Feel The Need To Now.

    The Simplicity Of The Matter Becomes More Violent In Emotion With Raw Feel, Raw Emotion Of The Inner Soul, You Both Bought A Lot Of Fire Yet Releasing The Heat On Normal Reactions From Myself. A Matter Often Touched But Never Explored.

    Peace & Harmony
    test
  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I see yall tag teamin' like Rock and Stone Cold...2 different styles and personalities coming together to make a joint that's just simply the shit. I bet it'd be tight if yall performed it at open mic and just went back and forth with lines and what not.
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  6. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    i like the back and forth technique you guys used......feeling it
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  7. Poetic N Nature

    Poetic N Nature New Member

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    very respectable piece... a pair of great minds....

    9/10
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  8. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    "they call me the quiet storm....
    b/c theres rage in my heart but i refuse to change form"
    ^^^
    i liked that line


    yall compliment each other nicely.....

    mind $oul you owe me a collab
    test
  9. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    haha... two great poets come together to create an even greater collaboration... wonderful job! you guys should do it more often...

    8 replies and 73 views?! come on! stop sleepin!!
    test
  10. bribaby

    bribaby New Member

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    You two are so good at this poetry thing. You guys were born to write poems together. HA HA [funny] Just complement each other so well. Really digging this piece. i was really feeling mind soul in this piece. yours was still good lpoet, but his stuff really seamed to hit home.

    favorite line from mind soul had to be


    In the mist of misery, blood runnin out my wrist,
    as i clench my thirst of death in my hands?

    and lpoet

    they call me the quiet storm....
    b/c theres rage in my heart but i refuse to change form

    Great piece once again you two. I could'nt write something like this in an hour let alone a couple of minutes.

    UP
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  11. Craccer_Jacc

    Craccer_Jacc SudAnillyst

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    man oh man this was nice u played off eachother very well i ahve never seen a format like this b4 in a poem kinda like a poetic cyph good shit man i hope u guys consider doing this again sometime



    my blessings
    test
  12. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    say word?!?

    Never read a collabo-poem before...lol....very interesting

    I liked this though....you both came together pretty well...and I like the vibe and how you bounce off each others lines

    the story and topic was a lil confusing BUT...it was different and it was probably just something you put together right then and there...so big props on that alone

    Overall I enjoyed it

    Stay up

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  13. Old Soul

    Old Soul Nipple Nibbler

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    Whoa, I'm seriously loving both of your styles. There are some really nice lines in here. Tons of emotion oozing. Nice job.
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  14. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    this was very complete and u complimented eachother well....u made it come together allmost effortlessly as the reader inhales each line through their eyes....

    god yall got skills...


    *spppppppppppppp.....can i collabo wit yall one day?*


    lol.........

    ~love to each of you, u inspire me~
    test
  15. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    WONDERFUL!!!! Just wonderful. I love reading poems by you two. Doing a collab just shows that you two are just amazing! You guys got great talent don't let it go to waste. One of these I woud love to write with you guys. I was truly feeling this piece. Once again great job. Keep it up!


    I'm Out
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  16. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    didnt think this would get this much love

    thanks everyone

    ...and i'm down to do a collab with anyone hit me up on aim

    mahgirba...or email

    indy_aaron@yahoo.com
    test
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