this one's called..... BLiNK

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Lyme, Jun 1, 2003.

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  1. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    I'll probably be right in stating you like my eyes
    (((riiight)))
    qestioning just what this is you're seeing
    (((tha lyte)))
    it is believing
    mission of achieving
    is it..
    that you're needing
    this
    connection
    this
    pupil perception
    for me
    to give you a feeding
    as if it was just in me
    to give
    to who
    to you
    like the sweetest of forbidden fruit
    the answers inside out
    right side in
    if you're a loser who never lost
    then what did you really win
    and just how much would it cost
    with one roll of the dice
    the blink of an eye
    tell me whats your price






    im obviously lifted goin off on some shit.. lol.. havent wrote in a long while.. peace yall
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  2. FukkedUPKidR

    FukkedUPKidR Guest

    Lyme! Either way your writing was always a bit trippy to me, I love it ...it's on a different level than what I'm used to reading..Ahhh, I haven't read anything from you in such a long time =)


    "like the sweetest of forbidden fruit
    the answers inside out
    right side in
    if you're a loser who never lost
    then what did you really win
    and just how much would it cost
    with one roll of the dice
    the blink of an eye
    tell me whats your price"

    So dope, beyond words..wooo
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  3. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    for real... ? well , my highest appreciation bella :)
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  4. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    that was lovely
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  5. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    good piece......really liking the ending and the forbidden fruit part.....
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  6. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Shit...I need to smoke some of what you got...how come you don't post in the realm anymore? This here reads like an open mic piece....you should memorize and pull.
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  7. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    "if you're a loser who never lost
    then what did you really win
    and just how much would it cost"


    Heh, but anyway, decent piece overall. I thought that you were talking about smoking, like homeboy over me said. "Pupil perception" kind've gave it away a bit, as well as, "Tell me what's your price". Anyway, overall, a nice read. Nothing that I'd read again though, too be honest. My blessings..
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  8. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    big up that b.c dro.. tehe [pus]
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  9. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    havent seen u around here in a while.....really feeling this piece

    like how u put this togetehr....creative......

    keep up the good work.....and dont stay gone for so long...
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  10. $eqra

    $eqra sometimes it hurts

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    Very beautifuly written. i misses you wrods and they bring hope hun. much respect
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  11. Nitsuj™

    Nitsuj™ We Are The Resistance

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    keep going...it seemed like it was leading to something more.

    somewhat unfinished, yet complete...


    to be honest, i wanted it to continue, but I really liked it
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  12. abztrakt

    abztrakt the impossible cool.

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    I liked it.

    to give
    to who
    to you
    like the sweetest of forbidden fruit
    the answers inside out
    right side in
    if you're a loser who never lost
    then what did you really win

    that was good.

    It had a nice vibe to it. Not the deepest piece, but it wasn't meant to be. You were just writing. And you wrote nicely. Good job, Lymey.
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  13. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    hey now.. these comments are meaning a lot to me.. thank you greatly repliers :) :) :)
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  14. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    I'll probably be right in stating you like my eyes
    (((riiight)))
    qestioning just what this is you're seeing
    (((tha lyte)))

    opening lines were the catch mellow yet vibatious
    good reading
    long time no speak to
    ill have to remify that
    love the piece
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  15. Lyme

    Lyme Guest

    [typekey] yes yes thanxness sweetness..
    my big bad about last time my battery died and I couldnt get in touch with you as much as I tried
    I did make a thread lookin for e'S in the alley tho
    :)
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  16. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    different in a good way
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  17. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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  18. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    guess u get a free up from me cause i heard u were fine...and i wanna see the pic...lol...
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  19. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    ipoet
    FO SHO PLAYER
    its true
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  20. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    oh snap this is oolllldddd schoolll hahahaha...
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