This Lighthouse

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by TheInkwell, May 22, 2011.

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  1. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    I watched you give away every flake of your heart of gold
    Like watching the petals fall and mark a dying rose
    They flitter to the ground like an airplane spiraling
    Scraping against thorns engraving love letter apologies

    We both know, God don’t make life easy, He makes it possible
    Grit your teeth, dig in your nails, climb the obstacles
    Cause though right now, we pull our hair out like grenade pins
    There’s more to life than just waiting for the explosion

    You were built to care, through the dark you shine for everyone
    So scarred by the past, but you fake that smile for anyone
    Too scared to cut the lights, but too brave to hide and run
    You froze your tears with your heart and loaded them into a gun

    That you hide in the shadows of the glow you emit
    Bawl and throw fits under the cover of blankets
    It hurts to know the truth, behind your shadow puppetry
    Everyone will want an encore of the lies that you’re marketing…

    Sometimes I wish the wind would carry you off the cliff you stand by
    And smother you in the waters that wave greetings of goodbye
    Just so you wouldn’t have to live the way you do
    You’ll burn out for the sake of others and forsake you…
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  2. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    now thats some poetic shit dude....good job...I like the imagery...
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  3. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    thanks man, much appreciated! =]
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  4. TheIlliterate

    TheIlliterate Well-Known Member

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    This is some next level shit man, well done.
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  5. donfully

    donfully New Member

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    Cool stuff dude. Is there a story behind this?
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  6. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Feel it good stuff
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  7. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    sorry guys! i didn't see the comments on this until just now, thanks for all the love

    i pretty much always stick atleast a sliver of something from my personal life into my stuff.. so yes, there is, it was written with someone i know in mind =] and no, i'm not able to elaborate haha
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  8. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    wow dude, so many elements were working well here. Simplicity touching and scraping out universal truths. That is hard to do and you did it very WELL. It moved well.

    Only thing was your first two lines, bad opener. Cliché.

    But damn i was happy to read this. I just posted a verse that compliments the themes you raised here.

    Top work here dawg.
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  9. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    ^ (I liked the opening lines)
    I thought the whole the poem was good. The imagery was beautiful
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  10. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    This was a beautiful read, continue writing !
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