...the sweetest kiss...

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  1. badassyella

    badassyella New Member

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    ....lips to lips...
    ...a sweet embrace...
    ...upon your mouth...
    ...you love the taste...
    ...no vocal cords...
    ...no sets of teeth...
    ...my love below...
    ...a yummy treat...
    ...parted gently...
    ...tongue in motion...
    ...wave by wave...
    ...drowned in this ocean...
    ...i hold you tight...
    ...overcome with bliss...
    ...the perfect ending...
    ...to the perfect kiss...
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  2. Madnick

    Madnick Modern Laureate

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    I thought this was a short nice kind of sexual poem thats what I got from it at least nice job.
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  3. badassyella

    badassyella New Member

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    yeah....lol...
    thanks ;o)
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  4. Senór Temp

    Senór Temp Child of Monrovia ...

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    That was quality! I'm not exactly a poetry head, but I can definately spot a good one. This read great, short 'n' sweet. Good stuff, GQ ... Stay up, babes ...
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  5. RealMS

    RealMS Ne te quaesiveris extra

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    ^L0L, your stars are glowing like X-Mas lights. Anyway-what a poem. It's nice to see what motivates ppl. to write. The usual two words put together that I'm about to use lol, short and simple, but also kinda sweet. Reminds me of my first real kiss, something worth to remember.

    Much Love girlie-
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  6. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    no doubt....the power of that first kiss...and told from your perspective was pretty intense....this was cool for what it was...short and sweet....stick around and share your heat

    ALSO PEEP THE POETRY BATTLE OF THE SEXIEST YOU SHOULD SIGN UP



    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=865718
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  7. badassyella

    badassyella New Member

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    thanks for the feedback guys.....:smile: lol
    I used to write a lot, but havent really been doing so lately...
    trying to jump back into my old routine though...
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  8. Index Lewis

    Index Lewis Sadomasochist.

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    even though your poetry sucks..

    i will still gladly eat your ass.
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  9. badassyella

    badassyella New Member

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    [dunno] ^..... lol
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  10. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    nice and direct and to the point, not bad imagery for being so short.

    peace
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  11. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    Short and sweet.

    Hollatchaboi
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  12. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    nice piece very nice, it was short it seems like you cut your kiss off short, next time expand on it and let it grow. tight
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  13. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    "...no sets of teeth...
    ...my love below...
    ...a yummy treat...
    ...parted gently...
    ...tongue in motion...
    ...wave by wave...
    ...drowned in this ocean..."


    For those who think this is a poem about a regular kiss, perhaps they should read it twice. yea, it's a kiss alright, just a different set of lips...That love below line though made me laugh cause I was listenin to Outkast while I was reading it and they was shoutin Love Below, and Speaker Box, lol...Anyway, pretty nice...not bad at all...
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  14. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    uhhhh..... who would mistake it for a "regular kiss"??

    anyway....

    this poem was either really sexually charged or im just very horny and this just pushed me over the edge......
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  15. badassyella

    badassyella New Member

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    lol yeah....
    I was wondering how many people got what i was talking about...:smile:

    and thanks for the feedback yall...;)
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  16. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    I think this poem was more for reaction than emotion...but...that's just my take. If you like it then thats all that really matters right?

    lol...

    do your thing...
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  17. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Answer your question???
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  18. mr.rip

    mr.rip New Member

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    that was very good ma, it sohnds sweeter then hersheys
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  19. AlmostFamous

    AlmostFamous U got a problem?

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    very short and sweet... I liked the message

    thanks for the read

    ghetoqueen... if you interested you can check out the thread in the Poetique Intercourse... battle of the sexiest... we could use your talent... thanks heres a link to the thread...

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=865718
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  20. *Hott Chocolate*

    *Hott Chocolate* current mood: happy

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    short and sweet and i liked how the story was played out. i thought it was a really cute poem!
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