The Suicide

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  1. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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    There was no calm before it happened.

    That's the sign they tell you to look out for in school, a
    sudden calm that follows the sadness.

    Like the jolt of a sailboat, following a
    gust of wind.

    No,
    if calm followed sadness,
    like politics after school
    shootings,

    then calm would be thunder
    and depression would be light.
    But we
    never
    make that association.

    So it seems to me, they've got it all wrong.
    There were no signs.
    And we certainly cannot make sense of this now.

    We stared at her wounds for as long as we could
    bare.
    And could not see what was beneath them.
    But that's the job of a

    Band-Aid.
    test
  2. Dopest101

    Dopest101 New Member

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  3. TheInkwell

    TheInkwell New Member

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  4. HAS Productions

    HAS Productions Member

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    nice, sweet and simple. I like satire and sarcasm, unless I'm wrong and the Band-Aid line through me off, stay up.
    test
  5. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    then calm would be thunder
    and depression would be light.


    i like how this impacted the poem.

    expect more tragedy...things in the US and aboard are only going to get worse, darker and uglier. hold fast
    test
  6. TANGLUNG

    TANGLUNG neo beatnik/peacemonger

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    i view the band aid as both paciifier to the psyche of the left behind{unanswered whys and all}
    as well as a question mark for the one who departed..thus the beat goes on..whether calm
    thunder or depessive light; perhaps
    its all part of the festivities of getting from point a to point b in the continuing adventures of
    human evolution..stay tuned true believers we someday may become true knowers afterall..beautiful piece Ink in its subtle hushes.yet loud as a bomb to the subconscious viewpoint.
    ~respect/blessings
    test
  7. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    your line
    then calm would be thunder
    and depression would be light is so deep. I can totally relate to this but when I got to the last part it through threw me off. But... It is good.
    test
  8. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    "No,
    if calm followed sadness,
    like politics after school
    shootings,

    then calm would be thunder
    and depression would be light.
    But we
    never
    make that association.

    So it seems to me, they've got it all wrong."


    This part seemed very personal. Distinctive from the rest, like it was something contemplated and the mind had no actual translation. Metaphors help to hide the pain. I like this one.
    test

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