The RSTL FINAL 4: Dahlohner VS L-Dogg

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  1. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    DAHLOHNER



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    L-DOGG




    THE FINAL 4 IS HERE!





    WHICH WILL MAKE IT TO THE CHAMPIONSHIP?
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  2. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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  3. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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  4. DahLohner

    DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy

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    Ok then.

    SIGNING IN

    Damn I didn't even get to vote this week, work and school are kicking my ass. So go ahead and take the prerequisite three votes away from me.


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  5. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    A Conversation With God

    The Man...

    why do you do this... hide and influence
    above the blue sky an make me highly influenced
    catch an arrow from cupid.. an have a marriage then ruin it
    can I pass your white gates or do you care that I’m stupid
    what is religion... can a slut be forgiven
    so she can make food while you stair at her butt in the kitchen
    I’m in love but I’m missin... the hugs an the kissin
    do I get the cold shoulder because I wouldn’t listen
    what’s with a nice ride... to get highs when I ride by
    or to get swat like Colin Farrell for thinking I’m fly
    does life even matter... is there something there after
    or was I reading lies from the bible chapter to chapter
    some cry or bring laughter... some die in disasters
    should I believe in you too and rely on my master
    or forget about that... an start attacking a flask
    so I can get all crunk an start unmasking my task
    is it good, a companion... can chicks live with a man when
    there 2nd to the money and all the shit that can happen
    I’m loving this life god... determined to fight odds
    even if I gotta use a little help from a tripod
    the devil isn’t my prob...I let him go when I write songs
    wrong or right the drive for life more clear with the lights on
    was the world meant to be strange... program cents in our brains
    the hand with sense gets restrained, to handle life as it change
    how about over population or hate on land not near our nation
    was our 51 states a mistake an will they break in an invasion
    stakes to hi to be taken... grow an continue to jump
    slow mo ya mind when its stuck.. and the winning is slumped
    see, I have advice...people are even glad I’m nice
    I do this all so you will greet me in the afterlife


    The God...

    well..to answer your question I’m a lot like a weapon
    people have the wrong idea I’m in your head for protection
    in all of your blessings...apart of all of your sorrow
    I be teaching all these lessons so that your seein tomorrow
    it doesn’t matter your race... an you don’t want me to start
    do you really think I wouldn’t let you pass for not being smart
    religions a message...an see, sluts are neglected
    people fuck the pussy all the time but I’m the only to bless it
    don’t mess with me kid... its not I care that u asked
    I’m only human since I made em, what, I cant stair at an ass
    as for the next question stop... u deserved to be socked
    wouldn’t u be pissed too if she ditched ya thoughts when you talked
    nice cars like mustangs... are so things are material
    kids who don’t want to look good are full of more bull then your cereal
    the secret about the bible... don’t deserve getting out
    pretend its all made up to help the church bring in clout
    you should believe in me if u think I’m in control of your fate
    or else when ya come to stand in line ill be closing the gates
    don’t be attacking no flasks.. the alcohol will react
    no leaves with your fall.. just a bruise an collapse
    if your after the money... leave the hunnies for hero's
    an stay a lonely man who gamble his life away at casinos
    and yes things can be odd but I’m doin my job this way
    when I pulled my hand back u took life as it came, it wasn’t restrained
    an to hell with population rise.. there’s ways to make them die
    put your guns down, start poppin Satan while your saying goodbye
    as for the hate for your country.. the problem is soon solved
    from fatsos by the name of A-Bomb, USA’s future doom resolved
    so save all your kindness, dream of heaven.. wait to see it
    believe in guiding blindness, and soon you will be greeted...thats all that's needed...
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  6. DahLohner

    DahLohner Straight Up Un-Holy

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    We had no line limits for these battles?? nice..

    19. 1 step before death on the brinks of Suicide

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    1946

    My momma always said she had a sickness, this bitch,
    My momma's mistress, worked her like a slave, whipless
    Ever since momma witnessed my daddy's lynching
    Miss White was a hindrance to all the pinching
    From the white men, who said Mom's a "fine nig*er factory"
    I listened to her denounce future kids after me
    Asking me to ignore the horrible stories
    That came up before the war of the Forties
    Poorly told, my momma scolding Sam and them
    She reminded me that dad was A MAN in Ten
    But that supposedly Miss White attacked him
    Drove him mad with lusty animal passion

    So I gave em sass when they said I'm next in line
    Ain't no girl gonna kill me,...but, with sex in mind
    I find myself bored with the girls from church
    And attracted to the denied world from birth
    But I kept it in the closet like a good pair of shoes
    Cuz it's far from holy and it wears the blues
    and blacks of bruises shared, but i'm scared to lose
    Control of emotions, hoping this explosive Dynamite
    Loses its bite and turns to dust, I'm a tight
    Bundle of nerves when Miss White bunches her purse
    Under voluptous milky white breasts and a terse
    frown followed by a wicked grin glow on her face
    When she catches my glances, cuz she knows that I hate
    And need her at the same time to affirm my manhood
    Take her, Make her MINE till she LIKEs it cuz I'm damn good

    Didn't think my chance would arrive so soon
    OUr home was raided by a mob of loons
    Raving and razing, claiming that my momma was a thief
    Blatently taking at least three appliances a piece
    Per week, they screamed this while they raided the home
    They "found" so much, no way she'd take it alone
    So of course I was blamed and taken to Miss White
    For a private conference to discuss why I tried
    To break the sacred trust, cuz my nig*erish ways
    Led me astray from the Christian trail she blazed
    Sat in her room, she soon revealed her tru agenda

    "Listen..you think my body's soft and tender"
    She sent a hand across my lap and whispered
    "I'll make your dreams come true" I bent and kissed her
    I wish that I could burn my lips off since then
    Cuz she made me a devilish offer, "Listen..
    I'll let ya momma keep working in peace
    If you let me get a piece of that dick that I need.."
    How could I refuse? She was granting my wishes
    So I shared her bed, her kisses, her lips, delicious
    Her tits and skin soft like silk and plush
    Like making love to pillows and milk and such...

    Until the door busts and in barge the mob
    Just in time for me to discharge my cock
    She goes from love nibbles to screams in split seconds
    I'm hit with weapons, dragged in a field with flames
    To be lynched, like Father like Son, sealed with blame
    And as I'm pinned to the pinnacle of splintery posts
    Her faint smile haunts me like a wintry ghost..



    *Back then, it was suicide to sleep with a white woman*

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  7. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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  8. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    over the no shows....
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  9. SIN2

    SIN2 as we speak

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    damn....both emcees came nice

    L-Dogg
    I felt this cause i wrote to tha same topic...u did this well....nice structure but the story i didnt reall enjoy...

    Dah came all out nice...all around ur flow and concept was hittin....luved this verse right hea...

    vote-Dahloner
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  10. WiSDoM

    WiSDoM I t0k yer wifes virginity

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    K well im going to drop the reply as im reading..quoting things from each story..etc..so as a start off

    L-Dogg:

    catch an arrow from cupid.. an have a marriage then ruin it
    can I pass your white gates or do you care that I’m stupid
    what is religion... can a slut be forgiven
    so she can make food while you stair at her butt in the kitchen

    this whole start off was really nice...nice way to inch urself into the story..props on that..

    does life even matter... is there something there after
    or was I reading lies from the bible chapter to chapter
    some cry or bring laughter... some die in disasters
    should I believe in you too and rely on my master

    can relate to that whole part of that...who is to say the bible is all the truth..ya know..nice way to put some thoughts into peoples heads..

    how about over population or hate on land not near our nation
    was our 51 states a mistake an will they break in an invasion

    very true...

    well..to answer your question I’m a lot like a weapon
    people have the wrong idea I’m in your head for protection
    in all of your blessings...apart of all of your sorrow
    I be teaching all these lessons so that your seein tomorrow

    story is getting better and better throughout..feeling that a lot..

    the secret about the bible... don’t deserve getting out
    pretend its all made up to help the church bring in clout
    you should believe in me if u think I’m in control of your fate
    or else when ya come to stand in line ill be closing the gates

    damn dropping some knowledge right here...dope shit right there as well..

    if your after the money... leave the hunnies for hero's
    an stay a lonely man who gamble his life away at casinos
    and yes things can be odd but I’m doin my job this way
    when I pulled my hand back u took life as it came, it wasn’t restrained
    an to hell with population rise.. there’s ways to make them die
    put your guns down, start poppin Satan while your saying goodbye

    dope story man..this whole verse had a lot of quoteables..stuck to the topic, dropped with some heat this round..flow was on point definalty..sick verse..

    on to Dahlohner..i hope i dont get booted after this damn reply lol..shit will fucking suck..

    Dahlohner:

    My momma always said she had a sickness, this bitch,
    My momma's mistress, worked her like a slave, whipless
    Ever since momma witnessed my daddy's lynching
    Miss White was a hindrance to all the pinching


    that flow right there was damn flawless..sick

    But I kept it in the closet like a good pair of shoes
    Cuz it's far from holy and it wears the blues
    and blacks of bruises shared, but i'm scared to lose
    Control of emotions, hoping this explosive Dynamite
    Loses its bite and turns to dust, I'm a tight
    Bundle of nerves when Miss White bunches her purse
    Under voluptous milky white breasts and a terse

    god damn..that was also flawless..this content is sick as fuck so far..

    Listen..you think my body's soft and tender"
    She sent a hand across my lap and whispered
    "I'll make your dreams come true" I bent and kissed her
    I wish that I could burn my lips off since then

    That buring ur lips off was extremly nice..good content right there...vivid..

    that ending was just dope..the whole story was written so well..great concept..

    this was prolly the best battle i have seen so far..

    I felt that ldogg came out with the better verse this week..well structred and well written..overall this battle was off the chain..and this is the most indepth ill go on a vote lol..took me like 25mins to do all this and read thru it all...so yeah...

    vote = ldogg


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  11. Tha Talent

    Tha Talent , Tha Master.

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    THIS is what i mean when i say DahLohner is dope.
    i loved this whole verse
    you developed it well
    and the ending was just dope
    it had every element
    and was just a great story.

    L-Dogg went with the topical side of things
    really, it was a good verse
    a lot of talent shown in writing
    but i am not sure the whole concept was good enough to beat Lohner's
    it was a very nice verse though
    flow was great throughout and you hit a lot of key points
    just not quite enough
    some really witty wordplay might have won this but for now.

    vote=Dahlohner
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  12. Nebz

    Nebz R.I.P. Point Game

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    Up for Tek
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  13. Richard Corey

    Richard Corey battle like a savage

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    yeah, I'm a have to go with Dahloner too. I liked his piece and his take on the idea of "suicide." Cause that's basically what it was back then. I liked his flow a lil' better than L's. Although L had a cool verse too (I really liked the question answer aspect) it was relatively simple: ask questions, answer questions. No real truth was discovered or uncovered.

    Dahloner's verse was a little "deeper." And I liked how he flipped his concept, so I'm going with him.

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  14. LDogg The King

    LDogg The King The High Life

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    good shit loner.. congradulations.. but dont u gotta post your 6 url's or else ya get a 3 vote subtraction? making it 1-0 me... an seeing how deadline is over.... that makes me the weener?
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  15. TeKneeK

    TeKneeK The Heart and Soul of RM

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    error..

    LDOGG goes to championship!
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