"The Opposite Problem"

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  1. namix

    namix u flip shit, i refine it

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    do you have the "opposite problem"?​

    an optimist?! NEGATIVE! just positively positive
    the secret of the universe relies upon the opposites
    for context in our populous, how competent are colleges?
    took a lot of ignorance to comprehend what knowledge is
    it’s a problem which is relative, its apparent we adopted it
    it's extremely unique, so commonly it’s moderate.
    see the glass as half full with a modest bit of cockiness;
    but if ya never topped it off, the cup would still be bottomless.

    without a winter would a summer even be a thing?
    if I never had a fall, would ya ever see me spring?
    it’s sink or swim; but what’s a swim without a sink?
    I think that I know – therefore I am, I think.
    we peak then plateau, and we gradually shrink
    no matter how far ya go, ya always on the brink.

    Do you have the opposite problem? it’s likely it’s so:
    answer with yes, or no – it’s residing in both.
    a friend, or foe, above, below – in binary code
    the ebbs and flows, they come and go, a high and a low


    we want yes without no, wanna know without lessons
    do not have the answer, but want it without question
    we look for direction: south, east, north, even west
    from chaos there is order, we’re an organized mess
    it’s simply complex, we want a grade without a test
    wanna win, no contest; wanna host? be my guest!
    every notion we protect, all the motions we object;
    are all perpetual at worst, and immoveable at best.

    beauty is skin deep… but how shallow is sight?
    when beauty’s best seen by the beholder who’s blind
    can ya find an absent mind present in a moment of time?
    in some cases ya capitalize; others, lower than swine.
    but it takes both to take off – a case where all the pigs fly
    and its the lowest swine who go most high, hoggin the sky‼

    Do you have the opposite problem? answer it wise:
    the answers black and white but may range from day to night
    no wrong or right, narrow or wide, just a demand to supply
    the secret’s too revealed to hide, so expect a surprise.


    find depth in our shallowness, fulfillment in our hollowness
    our future leaders will rise from those who can follow this.

    Problem Solved.
    test
  2. kyothechemist

    kyothechemist New Member

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    Best I've read yet on this forum; perfectly balanced.
    I comprehend the truth, keep speaking the language of the gods and the children shall learn to speak. We are the parents

    Much love,
    Kyo
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  3. Exxxxis

    Exxxxis .......................

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    an optimist?! NEGATIVE! just positively positive
    the secret of the universe relies upon the opposites
    for context in our populous, how competent are colleges?
    took a lot of ignorance to comprehend what knowledge is
    it’s a problem which is relative, its apparent we adopted it
    it's extremely unique, so commonly it’s moderate.
    see the glass as half full with a modest bit of cockiness;
    but if ya never topped it off, the cup would still be bottomless.

    ^^Damn...that's fuckin' dope.

    without a winter would a summer even be a thing?
    if I never had a fall, would ya ever see me spring?

    ^^Chea.

    beauty is skin deep… but how shallow is sight?
    when beauty’s best seen by the beholder who’s blind

    ^^Ill.

    This was great man...deep & meaningful content superbly worded, emotion wise it's raw...lyrically it's brilliant.I enjoyed this immensely in every aspect.

    ...Stay upwards.
    test
  4. namix

    namix u flip shit, i refine it

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    well said, discerned, and heard brethren.

    so few do - and of those that do, many forget to remember.

    glad you are one of the good ones hommie.

    keep planting those seeds and outgrow the weeds that so few seem to ever see.
    test
  5. namix

    namix u flip shit, i refine it

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    thanks a ton for the feedback bro! really appreciate it, and glad you enjoyed it!
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  6. MrFlux001

    MrFlux001 Member

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    I believe this is the first i've read from you. I dug the quoted, really dug it. The gradually shrink & fall lines were brilliant. Though, I feel it lost it's grip on me half way through. I generally don't like preaching & assumptions as to how the reader feels & thinks. I like it in drips fed through a relatively personal verse but not thrown at me like I should agree with it. Get me? Eitherway, this is one of the better pieces i've read in a quite a while. Keep posting.

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  7. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    first two stanzas were a joy to read...kinda fell apart after that slowly, though the structure was tight, just not as playful I guess.

    Enjoyed reading this, thanks.
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