The Love I Lost...

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  1. L.O.R.D

    L.O.R.D RawKey Productions

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    My heart boiled in anger and melted in fear
    I knew the time for us to part ways was coming, and i felt it was here
    I knew there was another man in my place
    Cause when i walked in, you were holding your hands to your face
    Tears running down your cheeks and arms
    Trying to explain, telling me that you didnt mean the harm
    The perfect relationship and i tried to hold to that
    My soul collapsed, and i could do nothing to hold it back
    Maybe i was trying to hard, or even being two nice
    I rushed home that day, even ran two lights
    You were the light I had been waiting to see..
    Just the thought that you were at home waiting for me
    Got me through the hard times.. daydreams of your smile
    Kept me going, and Now it seems all of the while
    Youve been with another, and that will hold to truth
    Apologies fill the air, but you know theres no excuse
    So as my eyes filled with tears, and my heart with pain
    All i can hear is the sounds of the rain
    try to explain, but im still not understanding why
    It hurts more for a man to cry, than for a man to die
    And at this moment, Im more hurt, than I can imply
    You put my feelings on the line, .....just standing by
    Youre speaking the who what when where now.. and the why
    I stare you in your eyes, as I wave my hand goodbye
    The last kiss has to be the worst...
    Because its painful, and more emotional than the first
    You grasp me in your arms, but its not standin for much
    Dishanding your touch, Put My finger to your lips and command you to hush
    Words mean nothing now... just let me leave in silence
    Stare me in the eyes, and Im thinking... why this?
    I step out in the rain, and stare down the long street..
    The rain combines with my tears and drips to the concrete.....
    test
  2. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I thought that this was a deep and very emotional piece that most of the Realm is quite damn good at.

    "I rushed home that day, even ran two lights
    You were the light I had been waiting to see.."


    Yes, I liked those lines a lot, it just came to me, as if you were running through all the lights to stop at your one and only light that you'd rather see, that you'd rather stop at. I was feeling the piece through and through, nice drop, mos def. My blessings..
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  3. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    I step out in the rain, and stare down the long street..
    The rain combines with my tears and drips to the concrete.....

    nice
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  4. L.O.R.D

    L.O.R.D RawKey Productions

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    thanks for the love, Im new to these parts, so the good words are appreciated.
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  5. L.O.R.D

    L.O.R.D RawKey Productions

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  6. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    I was feeling this piece because I got clear view of what my boyfriend felt when I cheated and messed up the best thing that ever happen to me. *Opps talking a lil too much.* But I just thought that I should tell u that I felt this piece and I could relate to it real well. This is good. Keep it up.

    I am out
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  7. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Had a great amount of personal depth to it. And some of the lines were quite original for such a piece. Especially liked the way you explored more deeper than most people do when talking aout stuff like this. Usually it's very raw and to the point. You know, jus there.

    ...nothing else to say, but..

    ..resp...
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  8. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    this was a very deep and emotional piece. Kinda reminded me of a piece i wrote awhile back, i can mos def relate to this. There were alot of quotable lines in this piece

    "It hurts more for a man to cry, than for a man to die"

    but that was my favorite, that was some real shit
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  9. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    wow....

    nice job.

    "It hurts more for a man to cry, than for a man to die"
    ^^now i ain't a man..but from what i've seen that's gotta hold some truth


    "The last kiss has to be the worst...
    Because its painful, and more emotional than the first"

    ^^was feeling that too.

    great piece....made me feel like i was watchin all this go down
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  10. L.O.R.D

    L.O.R.D RawKey Productions

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    thanx, i appreciate the good words yall.
    test
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