The Last Call

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  1. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    awkward silence
    a result of
    fear and knowledge
    of the power of words.
    I just want to know
    it wasn't all for
    nothing
    he just wants to be left
    alone
    to forget - or maybe remember
    but the empty words
    say more than i can bear
    gaps once filled
    with the sentiments we
    fought for,
    now filled
    with the silence
    of sentiments we fight against.
    the little that was said
    was just a little too much.
    the dialtone convinces me
    as the quiet greets me
    it was all for a time
    when nothing else mattered
    now i see what mattered
    was all for nothing.
    test
  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    welcome to the realm!

    feelin this piece right here

    he just wants to be left
    alone
    to forget - or maybe remember

    great lines.....

    can most def relate to this piece....

    lovin when new cats pop up in here with skills

    up
    test
  3. Atmosphera

    Atmosphera New Member

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    I'm Loving Your Sig, Your Feel Is Great That Last Call So Many Interpretations The Little Of What Was Said Was Just A Little Too Much - Power In Those Few Lines !!

    I Liked It Alot Power Over Peace
    test
  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Nice organizational structured format, I found this piece to be something original and explaining how that last phone call from that boyfriend/girlfriend or a friend saying he/she doesn't want to be your friend anymore is like. I thought that lines were strong and it seems as if you been through this many times before, just because you had such a strong delivering voice in this, so it came to life in your own life, feel me? Keep it drawn out, sonnie. My blessings..
    test
  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Nicely written piece. Wordplay and structure were pretty nice. Hope to see more from you

    one luv
    test
  6. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Welcome to the Realm...I'm quite impressed. I'll be keeping my eyes peeled for you.
    test
  7. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    thanx all for the feedbak, dont come here often so takes me awhile to reply, but thanx for feeling it....yeh my sig, a leonard cohen quotable, my biggest influence i think.......and haven t been thru this many times before....just the one time....THANKFULLY! but not completely new to the realm ...dropped a piece, burnt, awhile bak.....anyway, humbled by the replies, cheers : )
    test
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