"The Hurdled Topics Of New Age Earth" By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

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  1. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    The Hurdled Topics Of New Age Earth
    By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

    My Esophagus Seems To Have Converted To Become Defective,
    Use Of A Five Digit Grasp Has Been My Way Of Expression.
    My Paper Is A Device Used To Take Over Utterance,
    As My Mouth Becomes Depleted Of Saliva With Brist And Secured Lips.

    Brainstorm Ideas And Figures Of Truth,
    With Use Of Utensils Speaking Upon The Weapons Of Man.
    Pakistan Hands Becoming Sawed Off In A Stealing Process,
    Or Differences Between Races,
    As We Gain A Tempered Fuse.

    The Bruised Awakenings Summoned By Our Own Lord,
    As Our Society Becomes Negative,
    Creating Our Own Judgment Day.
    We'll Shape The Likes Of Jesus Christ To Predict Our Deaths.
    Because War, Discrimination, And Hatred,
    Is Our Choice Of The Murdering Sword.

    This Is What I Address And Conquer Over My Main Issues,
    As I Think Of Other's Problems,
    And How They're More Difficult.
    Just Because I Purchased Two Gallons Of Milk Each,
    One Went Bad,
    And I Became Frustrated Which Completes Selfish Acts.
    Selfish Acts, Because Others In The World At The Same Time,
    Are Starving And Being Abused.​
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  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    got damn.....Hot shit....lovin how this was put together....


    We'll Shape The Likes Of Jesus Christ To Predict Our Deaths.
    Because War, Discrimination, And Hatred,
    Is Our Choice Of The Murdering Sword.

    fav line....but this was chop full of dope lines...

    kinda reminds me of poetic N natures piece that he has up right

    now....except his gave me better visuals than this...but this was

    still dope....keep bringing it kid....lovin what u bringing to the table

    oh...and i think u can only have 2 up at a time...dont wanna flood

    the board...u lucky i like your work or i woulda came up in here

    and talked shit...[funny]

    UP
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  3. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    damn....im speechless...

    lol.......i rarely get this way.........this was Really Good.....


    i felt that deep spritual connection that was conveyed...if people can read through the lines...they will see too...i got the two milks u bought line and u are so talented...


    let me just say this...talent does not lay with everyone and u definetly have it....


    ~you get **********(ten stars) from me mos def~
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  4. DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA

    DA-SMOOTHEST-TALKA The Silencer

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    i like.. my fav lines well stanza to be exact was

    Brainstorm Ideas And Figures Of Truth,
    With Use Of Utensils Speaking Upon The Weapons Of Man.
    Pakistan Hands Becoming Sawed Off In A Stealing Process,
    Or Differences Between Races,
    As We Gain A Tempered Fuse.



    i liked that whole junt rite there and as others said i was kind of speechless as to what i should exactly say so i'll say for my first time reading some of your work i liked this a lot especially the stanza above. keep writing and i'll check out some of your other peieces when i have more time.

    holla
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  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Man fuck all that favorite line stuff Nephew, I liked the whole shit...This almost goes hand in hand with what I wrote in Until I Find Something Constructive...Just in lot more detail and imagery...I think imagery and such is my weakness...anyway, Sounds to me like someone being fed up and taking a stand and lashing out etc. Not sure how close I am, but that's a little of what I got.
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  6. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    solid piece......i was feeling the last stanza the most....im going to check out your other stuff now.....
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  7. ILL SEEKAH

    ILL SEEKAH Deaf to Depths of Death..

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    Feelin this....strong piece, you expressed your thoughts well through-out. What I got out this was the corruptive nature in our surroundings, and pretty much...reality is being demolished..all we do is gotta peep the news. Anyways I like your writing style. Kepp doing thing...and elevate.

    Peace and God Bless​
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  8. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    wow very good stuff right here

    I really enjoy reading your poems...you seemed to know what you doing

    You touched on a lot of problems and issues going on today in the world

    I found this very interesting

    Not to long not to short...and I like the use of word-play you had going

    Aight stay up

    PEACE AND GODBLESS
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  9. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Basically what I was feeling aungee is that I needed to lash out, so you were right. I just needed to cover different areas, that's what my pieces are usually about.. Just me lashing out with some intellectual points (at least I hope so, heh) or of me speaking of true love between a man and female, etc..

    Much love for all those who had posted feed so far!
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  10. *GeMiNeYeZ*

    *GeMiNeYeZ* ~§¤Sweet Shinobi¤§~

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    ^^ tru

    nice piece indeed... and u did a great job at touching so many bases!
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  11. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    What has already been said need not be repeated, either that which others have said here or elsewhere under your pieces. I can tell you I read this while standing (because I was in a hurry) and therefore ended up reading it out loud.

    What you have done is written a great poem and short dramatic piece.
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  12. MissChevious

    MissChevious New Member

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    This is a hard hittin peice ...I must agree with everyone else :)

    This was well structured and I enjoyed be blessed by your works

    ---Luv----
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  13. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    I here to give you blessing just like you blessed me. I was feeling this on the real. It was written so well and flowed real good. I can't wait to read more of your work. Just thought I shoud stop and give u few words. Once again great piece.

    I'm Out
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  14. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    a very smart poem. big words with a big message makes you think and admire at the same time ^
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