ghet, think about fixing the sentence & paragraphs if you don't want to turn off 1/4 of your readers by page 1. Seriously, I was totally thrown off, it looks like your character is a nihilist (beleives in nothing, i.e. amoral) who seems to be targetting race, among a pool of many many factors, for no reason. And keep in mind, this is coming from someone who has read your posts FOR YEARS and thinks YOU (i,e. Ghetallion) isn't racist or arbitrarily pissed by any means, yet sees this character as portrayed here as either arbitrarily angry or racist. Maybe run it by a stranger and see what their impressions are. keep in mind this is a book your writing, not a dialog. You only get one chance to make an imporession on the reader, he can't ask any questions and you can't answer any questions. So form is very important, especially for the first few pages where most readers basically decide if they will read on or not. I like the style of writing though.