The Demon Chase #1

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  1. bagglad

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    The Demon Chase #1

    At a table at the party has an able body but its time
    To leave an abnormal condition of affairs left blind
    Frictions in the airs started to think divine as I drink wine
    It was mostly fright on this ghostly night low on petro and
    Must go through the ghetto, concerned about my mission
    Turned on the ignition down hearted and corrupt with vision
    The car started up got collision from Geico not a psycho by
    No means, the demons are screaming for the seventh key try
    Bring back the world of darkness I hold number seven it’ll fry
    The hand of devil he can’t stand on the level with Christ eye
    Of the beholder inside the key the blood of god I’m thug at odds
    So my Ebonics are bizaare, being chased by a demonic car like todd
    Bridges I have to live Different strokes and meet magnificent folks
    That’s willing to help in this fight, dang ran out of gas and the man
    In the demonic car is approaching fast I blocked the road to take a stand
    Lock and load my M16 to kill them mean demons oh fuck my door stuck
    Need some hardcore luck jumped out the window wanna go to Star buck
    When this is over be nice it’s hard being a soldier of Christ and now sing
    A hym in my heart need an abundance of good things wearing hood bling
    jump out the window and somehow the car plowed broadside into mine
    missing me by three seconds this seventh key must be my weapon the crime
    of demons is extensive and expensive my car blew up it was only true luck
    I escaped this fatality being great a reality went by foot to the next town life up
    For grabs started to look around what’s been revealed so far is that I must steal
    A car

    My link--- http://board.rapmusic.com/post-ya-a...decc-ft-reapacussion-hot-shit-drop-links.html
    My link--- http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1258215-chase-murda-presents-hardbody.html
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  2. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    mos def feelin this one kid i like to see other people post for real i like to check out other people shit too not jus only mine..good flow good topic//keep it 10 son
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  3. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    wow chase that's the first tie i got a ten on any post thanks for the props on this one for real
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  4. Myke 1997

    Myke 1997 New Member

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    yea man, real shit. good to see tht not everyone has succumbed to mainstream 10/10
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  5. bagglad

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    thanks for the props myke really appreciate that
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  6. GODsGeneral

    GODsGeneral Flawless Victory

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    good stuff bro
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  7. bagglad

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    THANKS GODsGeneral FOR THE REALNESS
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  8. GODsGeneral

    GODsGeneral Flawless Victory

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    no problem homie...if someone could please vote on my battle..its in the battle area..its against lyricalpriest, and he wrote my name as GOD'sgenital so..look for that...dont worry i killed him for saying that..
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  9. bagglad

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    OK will do probably be tonight but will peep it put the link up
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  10. DFVaInSDF

    DFVaInSDF I'm Back

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    Damn I'ma have to start checkn the battles again. God's genitals thats funny even he had ta admit it.

    Now fa Bagglad, yea man this was better than the last one, better structure, flow still seemed off at points but it probably sounds better than it reads. Had some decent imagery in there too, everyone expects to win in their stories its gud ta see u at least had troubles along the way, like the car door. And I liked how u re-referenced the key as bein wut saved u cuz it brought an exuberance to wut mite have normally seemed predictable. Gud shit.

    Thanks again fa peepin my joint-Cash on Decc, feel free to hit up one of the other 2 also. Links are in da sig. Again, Gud Look.
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  11. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    dats som straight up gangsta shit
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  12. bagglad

    bagglad Member

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    thanks for the props on this one for real yall
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  13. twenty_ROCK

    twenty_ROCK Crack Illz

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    damn i like it
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  14. bagglad

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    Thanks for the props for real everybody i must do a part 2 on this here
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  15. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    lol...what up bagglad? this shit's cool. you got good vocab. My deal with this, as with most people on this board, your lines are stretched, man. Write this to a beat, rap it out loud, and it'll come together a little more smoothly. A decent flow is the key to having something hit a whole lot harder. Otherwise you got good shit man. Just condense the flow and it'll all be on point. Keep it up. 1
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  16. bagglad

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    thanks ace and alll else for critique and props
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