The Chase

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  1. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    Lord Gol the legendary had been set to marry Cass
    We loved each-other but I was of secondary class
    Gol was a powerful man possessing bountiful lands,
    gold fountains and out-posts on mountains which spanned
    the borders he commanded – which were a hostile region-
    horded full of bandits crafting wicked plots and scheming
    Wars-flames soon combusted, burned and spread freely
    hence Gol departed West to discuss terms for a treaty
    It was during this time I decided to make my move
    using my warriors mind - quick as a snake and smooth
    broke into her chamber...kissed...then fled in the night
    knowing my danger...if caught they'll put my head on a spike

    Out in moon-lit grasslands...running – our hearts raced quick
    as we raced concealed under the protection of the dark’s blanket
    Shrouds of night...no clouds in sight...away from the fortress
    we bound in fright headed right into the maze of the forest
    Gnarled branches of tress and dark canopies...hang above
    We flee...hearts pumping frantically...strained and drugged-
    off of adrenalin...trembling inhaling shallow gasps of air
    we head-in thicker...love and fear paving a passage clear
    I glance back...the rear-view shows no signs of a follow
    we're flying past hollows awaiting the lights of tomorrow
    Until we collapse in a heap...heaving...panting and weak -
    huddled in arms...feeling charmed by the enchantment of sleep

    We awoke to find the sun had risen like a phoenix
    thoughts choked my mind...if someone has seen us
    I'll as be good as a dead man...or thrown in a dungeon
    by stones I'll be bludgeoned...I stood up erect and -
    pulled my lady to her feet...”We must resume upon our fleet.
    We're being followed by trackers. I heard a movement to the east
    There's two or maybe three.”... no time for us to flee
    I heard 'em closing in. Grabbed her an' climbed the highest tree
    from up above I saw the tracker moving faster than a cat
    He knelt down to the ground; arrows strapped upon his back
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    touched the waters of the stream - eyes wandered to our tree
    I knew if we - stayed here any longer we would probably be seen
    drew my bow and arrow...view narrows...nothings left to do
    drew it back...Thwack!...the impact cracked his head in two
    He hit the floor dead. A river of blood replaced his fore-head
    the site was horrid. A guard rushed forward followed by four men
    so be it...it's war then...I guess that death's your fortune
    I slayed them all remaining unscathed like the headless horseman
    I grieve for their blood
    which was spilled for no reason
    we leave then continue fleeing
    for our freedom and love
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  2. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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  3. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    god damn man fuck you for being so good ha ha that shit is ill incredible vocab an flow you killed it man keep em comin
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  4. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    theres a pic that goes right with the story

    but it wont let me post it

    can anybody help?
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  5. cram oremor

    cram oremor New Member

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    Dang homie that's ill. To me rap is all about telling a story or getting a message across. U did it right!
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    BTW how'd u even come up wit something like that. Blew my mind!
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  6. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    there ya go..


    dope written as well :)
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  7. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    jesus, just sign up for the RSTL already ;)
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  8. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    thanks no good

    I'll make a rstl run when I got some more time for sure.. I'm trying to work on blowing up on youtube and with beats right now
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  9. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    sleepin' eh
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  10. lyricalpriest

    lyricalpriest Rap Games Dawson Creek

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    no one really gives feed back in this forum... people used too 10 years ago.. shits pretty dead.. good drop tho homee
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  11. SeakDaKaper

    SeakDaKaper New Member

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    nice story. paints a picture. dope thread.
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  12. IgloS

    IgloS Eye Glows

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    yup I remember those days to

    before face book and myspace took over the internet I guess

    thanks tho
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  13. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    well you got open mic of the week , and my rules are enforcing feedback. I hope people will just start dropping more feedback tbh
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