The Birth of Tragedy

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  1. BirthOfTragedy

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    It has been stated that the fault lies not in our stars/
    I question that belief/
    the fault lies in our stars but how far?
    an answer im desperate to seek
    the problem cannot be from within as regarded/ its difficult to intuite just what a star is? my heart lifts as I depart this world with an ardent mark in my carcus
    the struggle is left for the weak and the remnants left is death or defeat/
    life is tarnished
    the fault does lie in our stars for in ourselves is too deadly to perceive
    the birth of tragedy begins and in tragedy it shall leave
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  3. christofer

    christofer .Nothing Is Sacred.

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    kinda out of order in my eyes..the content was there but no structure is never a good thing...keep on writing..
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    thank you sir for the advice, more is appreciated
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    This is something new that I am implementing, it is a mixture of antiquity poetics with complex structure containing vague lessons on which to analyze and comprehend, a style I learnt while a student in a poetics class at the University of Pennsylvania.
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  6. eatemup

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    the structure does seem off but like you said you are trying something diffrent tight piece either way
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  7. BirthOfTragedy

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    thanks for the love man thanks for the love,
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    up one more gain'
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    gotta love them sleepers
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  10. BirthOfTragedy

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    I assume that the only forums that matter on rapmusic are lipstick gallery, and audio battles
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  11. eatemup

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    it's just it is the holiday season and people are doing other things
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  12. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    interesting piece. Got alot of unanswered questions. Wish you would have went in depth with it instead of ending it so short. Keep it up though. Happy New Year.

    one luv
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  13. BirthOfTragedy

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    happy new year to you too and thanks for the props
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    I thought this was good. You proposed some good questions that many a human being could relate to. Your structure was yours, surely it will be said that it is not perfect among academics. But in my opinion that does not take anything away from your words; Infact with the readers intuition, it flows very nicely.
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  15. BirthOfTragedy

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    thanks a lot geenyus, I appreciate the praise
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  16. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    it's well written...its different than what you usually see which gives your structure originality...this is a very broad to talk about...i wish you would have gone deeper into the subject because there are soo much to say...but it worked out well...i enjoyed it...and happy new year!
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    thanks a lot thanks a lot
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    sup ladies and fellas
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    upping for the public
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    hello everybody.
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