"The Abyss Of Mind, Body, And Soul" By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

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  1. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    The Abyss Of Mind, Body, And Soul
    By Alex Hornby aka TuNed RooT

    Silence My Aggression And Hush Patriotism.
    My Own Written Bars I Create Saw Off The Mental Bars Of My Prison.
    My Hands Are In Pain.
    So, How Must I Hold My Head To Maintain Sane?
    Like Scarred Wives From Abusive Husbands.
    Like Regrettable Brides With Inside Feelings Hurting The Situation.
    Their Are More Dents Under My Skin.
    Then When You Look At My Facial Dimples.
    Been Spit On.
    Like Racist Mixed Prejudice Individuals Thinking Slavery Is Still Around.
    Been Harassed.
    Like A Respectable Woman Invaded And Couldn't Make One Sound.
    How Can We Live In Cruel Remarks?
    How Can We Live In A World Where Hatred Is Better Than Love?
    Only Time You May Be Open Minded Is Through This Art.
    Society Uses Eyes, Not Ears.
    So, Let's Read And Hear Through Eyes And Become More Clear.
    Just To Pour A Fourth More Of My Mind Is What I'm Asking For.
    A Simple Task For Each Mature Form Of A Human To Listen To Me Speak.
    Recite A Speech To Help You Learn.
    Earn A New Way Of Enduring Both Education And Common Sense.
    Know What I'm Trying To Say And It'll All Make Sense.
    Bench Press More Pressure Then What You May Assume.
    It's Not All About Cigarettes Or Alcohol That Your Friends Get You Into.
    It's The Road From School To Occupational Jobs.
    It's The Road From Being Once A Child.
    To A Teenager.
    To An Adult.
    It's The Highway From "It's Your Fault, Not Mine!".
    Then Changes With Maturity To "Maybe It Is Me, I Apologize.".
    We All Change And The World Needs To Know That.
    One Day, Let's Stop Idiotic Confrontations.
    And Pat Someone Else On The Back.
    Acknowledge The Fact That Others Are Just Like You.
    Flesh, Eyes, Nose, Mouth.
    The List Goes On.
    So, Why Do I Still Not Feel Like I Belong?
    That's The One Question All Wants To Know.
    Deep In The Hearts Of Women And Men.
    Maybe It's Because, Adam Ate That Apple.
    And We Can't Avoid The Definition Or Action Of The Word Sin.​
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  2. Jen Li

    Jen Li New Member

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    this was off the chain for realz..
    this was madddddd deep...
    vocab was good
    excellent peice..
    im really impressed...

    i'll drop some proper feedback wen i get home
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  3. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    How Can We Live In Cruel Remarks?
    How Can We Live In A World Where Hatred Is Better Than Love?
    Only Time You May Be Open Minded Is Through This Art.
    Society Uses Eyes, Not Ears.

    really feelin those lines...the whole piece but esp those lines
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  4. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    A kind of soulful yet thoughtful cry or plea of reason...

    ...digging deep into but mostly under the 'insanity' of society, and the world in general....'man' if you would...

    ...i shall refrain from going on...


    ...resp...
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  5. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Much love for the feed so far, still looking to get some more, ofcourse.
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  6. icedemond666

    icedemond666 §pilla illest killa

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    Wow u know i really felt that cuz thats kind like my life thats why i write so i really felt it keep it up much love
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  7. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    REALLY NICE POEM RIGHT HERE

    this was well put together...really feeling the emotion in this...very nice use of word-play....and I REALLY like the message/meaning behind this one

    "Their Are More Dents Under My Skin.
    Then When You Look At My Facial Dimples."


    favorite lines....

    good job
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  8. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I like that...the way you formatted it though makes it look longer than it actually is, and it'll probably intimidate some readers. The message was clear, and the delivery was on point. All in all a good read.
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  9. The Real Nick

    The Real Nick New Member

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    VERY nice poem. Strong message using simple similes/metaphors. Love it.

    Later...
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  10. NyceQTV

    NyceQTV Grayscale

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    i dont know much bout poetry.... or even reading pieces... but this was pretty nice, i just wanted to return the favor, pretty deep shit..... nice lil poem
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  11. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Love is pouring for ya'll. Good look on the feed so far, just keep it coming..
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  12. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    Mr. Alex Hornby...what have you done and why have I been sleepin on this...

    My apologies!!

    This is an excellent piece of work! You reached into your mind and used the passion that I KNOW you have for the written word...and taught us something nothing short of beautiful.
    This piece is inspirational!

    "Society Uses Eyes, Not Ears.
    So, Let's Read And Hear Through Eyes And Become More Clear.
    Just To Pour A Fourth More Of My Mind Is What I'm Asking For.
    A Simple Task For Each Mature Form Of A Human To Listen To Me Speak.
    Recite A Speech To Help You Learn.
    Earn A New Way Of Enduring Both Education And Common Sense.
    Know What I'm Trying To Say And It'll All Make Sense."

    Not trying to minimize the rest...but that part really spoke to me.

    Thank you for posting this!
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  13. The PusherMan

    The PusherMan New Member

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    this was very good, nice vocab, and it was really deep, good job
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  14. Party Crasher

    Party Crasher New Member

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    I like this...It was deep as hell, i like this yo...

    "So, How Must I Hold My Head To Maintain Sane?
    Like Scarred Wives From Abusive Husbands.
    Like Regrettable Brides With Inside Feelings Hurting The Situation.
    Their Are More Dents Under My Skin.
    Then When You Look At My Facial Dimples.
    Been Spit On."

    ^^^Like that part...


    Deep meaning!!! You got talent...Keep Dropping!

    Peace
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  15. PrOvOcAtiVeThOuGhT

    PrOvOcAtiVeThOuGhT New Member

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    very confrontin piece..lots a issues handled concepts displayed..and its written so you ask yourself certain question..and that as you obviously know..makes a good piece...

    its a bit long dough only criticisme I can give you is..if you want all the info to sink in like it should..you shouldnt make it as long as you did..cuz when the next issue is layed down..you tend to let the old one go..

    other then that great piece...the main question/statement came out troughout the whole piece..
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  16. e'S

    e'S sdrowkcab mi kool

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    ok player
    haha
    man this was a really good piece



    Society Uses Eyes, Not Ears.
    So, Let's Read And Hear Through Eyes And Become More Clear

    no doubt
    well all i can say is its not long just stop and read it people

    do some more pieces
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  17. MC Devious

    MC Devious New Member

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    Im not a big fan of poetry but if I was this is the type of shit I'd read....real emotional piece here....imagery was off the chain for sure......everything was wrote in a way that everyone would see it in their own way and it touched on points that everyone knows or has atleast seen b4....real nice piece man keep em droppin
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  18. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Abusively beautiful to the sensibility of the senses.
    Great piece.
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  19. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Waitaminute: Tuned RooT just said he was fourteen years old.

    Can't believe the skill here. Just can't believe it.
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  20. MISSKEYdaQUEEN

    MISSKEYdaQUEEN Watch the black panther..

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    I know..he just told me too..I feel so..hmm...sheesh ionno...old??
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