That Place

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  1. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    I try to remember tha times when me and Mama got along...
    But those times... have long been forgotten- erased from memory
    Sometimes...sometimes I try to go to tha little place I've created in my head
    my little DreamWorld and I try to relive those precious times.
    I believe everyone's got one
    A little place in tha corners of your mind
    Where u go to escape tha pressures of the world
    Tha harsh truth of Reality.
    Where u get along with your siblings again.
    Where relationships always work out tha way u planned them to.
    Time is never too slow,
    And it doesn't fly either
    Always 'just right.'
    You'll never see a single sight of poverty or devastation.
    Prayers are always answered.
    Your clothes are never too tight,
    And tha weatherman's right for once.
    Mamas never yell, Papas never slap.
    Everything's perfect-
    Just tha way u want things to be...

    test
  2. *Princess*

    *Princess* skantless bitch

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    damn...im feelin this piece...i go to that place a lot with my boyfriend...nice piece here keep it up
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  3. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Nice piece man. I just wanted it to be longer...Seems like it would have been real big if you would have kept on going with it.

    one luv
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  4. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "Where relationships always work out tha way u planned them to. "

    Yea that would be some world

    Shit the world is far from what we want it to be, it aint never gonna be perfect. I feel you on this piece 100percent, except the whole mama thing i can't really relate to that, but everything else i can, cause i've felt that way at one time or another. Just nice piece, the emotion was crazy i just love how you put everything in a nice perspective of perfect. This piece is one of the most beautiful pieces i've ever read here, nice writing man.


    Stay Up, Much Love, Peace
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  5. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz everybody
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  6. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    this was ill i liked it short but powerful
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  7. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i'm glad you posted this...i told u it was a good piece
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  8. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    i'm glad i posted dis also, thankz everybody 4 tha positive replys
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  9. Iceodu921

    Iceodu921 Resident Sports Genius

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    that was real good..hopefully one day my poetry can get to that level.
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  10. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Yo man, this was nice...I was feelin it from start to end because it stood out from the rest of your work. I've got a poem like this too, about a place where we all want to get away from it all, including ourselves...Anyway, loved it..
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  11. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz ice.
    xero-i guess i just got tired of writtin' tha same ol same ol u know, thankz
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  12. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  13. -WiT-

    -WiT- New Member

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    This was a pretty nice piece here, man. You were pretty descriptive in illustrating "that place" you were trying to get across to the reader. I was definately feeling the idea behind this. Overall, this was pretty well done here. Good work.

    Return the favor if you can here.
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=707469

    Thanks.
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  14. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz man, i'll get at dat ina sec
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  15. shaft600

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    He Storm with aggression as a form of expresion

    He Storm with aggression as a form of expresion
    Alarm about this profession caused harm in sessions
    Of rap, in America wild with character ands style that shifts
    Accepts gifts and step swift to the microphone to uplift
    Domes, twinkle in his eyes as he sprinkle true vibes speakers
    Blasting, peepers passing, housekeepers trashing debris sweepers
    Mop up drinks, and wring out slop in sinks, hot pink minks
    Worn by the rich, at a concert so alert to the work, this thug links
    Rhyme to time and crime the audience blind the brainwashing stinks
    He trusts the fans will discuss plans on buying his CD now winks
    At a girl brown round butt
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  16. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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  17. Six

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    hott piece...i can mos def relate to tha feelin of wantin to always be in "that place"....beautiful
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  18. iLL Script.

    iLL Script. ~Poetic~

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    thankz homie
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  19. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    Great piece man. This is an inspiration to me to write about deeper more meaningful ideas but still things that are close to my heart. I love
    Mamas never yell, Papas never slap.
    Everything's perfect-

    Those are the two most perfect lines throughout.
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    glasspen Brooklyn Bitch

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