Tap Dancing on Reality (Collabo with Feme Sole)

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  1. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    My...
    Educated Feets
    Tap dance on the streets
    Of Reality
    To imaginary drum beats,
    With tattered shoes...

    I'm too poor to buy a new pair,
    So I throw the dice
    In the game of life...
    "Daddy needs some new shoes..."

    Tap dancing on Reality
    Singing the blues...
    I'd rather pop-lock
    Up the block
    To a bouncy tune,
    Called a Dream...






    They wanted me to do ballet
    but its my choice
    and I want to make some noise.

    I like to call it spiritual map enhancing
    Tap dancing
    on reality.....

    I leave my mark
    By being heard,
    I can tell a thousand stories
    Without a single word.

    I reflect reality like a mirror,
    but instead of just seeing
    they can hear,
    the truth is clear if you use your ears.

    Tap dancing on reality
    Showed me how to see.
    I don’t just look at things now
    I feel them.


    And when im finished…..
    I deserve that bow.
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  2. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    like i said, you make me look bad with this one :).......really feelin your piece......its hard to do blind stuff but it was fun.....youre my new collab buddy man
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  3. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    If you actually look at it good...it looks like you picked up RIGHT where I left off, from a different angle...Yeah we definitely gotta do that again, cuz that was sexy how we pulled that off.
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  4. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    oh goodness i didnt even notice that........thats whats up :)
    good topic man
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  5. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    I told ya...next topic's on you...don't think too hard about a topic, that's the key. First thing that pops up in your mind....I'll start it off next time.
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  6. unspoken1

    unspoken1 Revolutionary Wordsmen

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    yo i was feeling this peace

    Tap dancing on Reality
    Singing the blues...
    I'd rather pop-lock
    Up the block
    To a bouncy tune,
    Called a Dream...

    my favorite part....this was a great peace
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  7. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Yeah i was feelin this mos def. Both came ill. Augee you got that old school laid back stye still. Loved this. Feme your part was just flawless....

    one luv
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  8. vinous

    vinous New Member

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    yeh, feelin both of these, cud be mistaken as somthing written by jst one person, u really compliment eachothas styles
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  9. iconoclast

    iconoclast Guest

    AAHHHHHHHH :(

    lol, jk... this was very dope indeed.. especially seeing as though feme wrote her part in under 10 minutes.. amazing
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  10. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    yeah i wrote it mad fast cause i didnt want him to have to wait......but after i saw his part i wished i would have taken more time lol......

    thanks for the love yall [heart]
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  11. UnknownLady

    UnknownLady Senior Member

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    This was good. Great collabo!!! Keep up the good work.

    I am out
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  12. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    You didn't need to spend more time on it...you were on point before you evwen knew it...You picked up where I left off before I even started. That in itself was ill.
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  13. mocha_licious

    mocha_licious New Member

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    cool yall.....i liked this style and how u used dancing to tell the story...mos def original and compelling...it kept me interested and u two definetly got skills.........one love to both of u...
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  14. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    A very nice collab.

    Feme started it off very well. Some good imagery used and some indepth creativity shown.

    Then Augee picked up where she left off very well. Carrying on in the same 'essence'.

    The ending i felt maybe could've been rounded off a bit better to go with the way the whole piece was. But it's all good..

    ..resp...
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  15. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    loved it....i could hear this on an open mic stage with some drums in the background..very nice
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  16. GorillaThugMC

    GorillaThugMC Minotaur Orator

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    Damn, this was short but I was loving it, the verbal (or in this case, textual) imagery was real nice!

    Maybe I should do Poetry, I can drop the hot shit without needing to do too much!

    Like this Haiku right here!

    I'm an alleyway emcee, old to the street
    Ripped your fuckin' heart out, so I could flow to the beat
    Muthafucka!

    =D
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  17. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    That's not a Haiku...a Haiku is 5-7-5 syllables....but thanks for checking us out.
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  18. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    Very nice... I haven't stopped by in awhile but I'm impressed that was nice flowed well and even though you two were off a lil it's ok cause you get the feel that it's from the Fella's point and the Gal's point of views. Nice work.
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  19. GorillaThugMC

    GorillaThugMC Minotaur Orator

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    Ehh..you're..just..not reading it the way I read it!!!

    Haha I knew there was a certain amount of syllables for each line, I was just too lazy to ask or try to remember....

    'twas a JOKE anyways!
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