symphony concert

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  1. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    another short
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    I'm a pundit of orchestral table scraps
    the arbitrary tremors of afterthought
    in the second balcony, forty-second row
    nose bleeding, I occupy
    comfortably
    a proud oak chair.

    Blacklisted above
    muffled violin palpitations and
    insipid pulls of rhythmic murmur
    I begin to fold my concert program
    seven times.

    The Woodwinds dispatch a hum-drum
    of empty spectacle
    dog fighting
    the hollow sorties of paper airplanes
    raining down from the second balcony,
    forty-second row.
    Launched with the technology
    of my velcro shoe.

    The Strings respond
    one octave lower, pitched
    in stealth formation. Forcing a drop zone
    to dissident sound gardens of
    predatory hummingbirds.
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  2. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    explain the underlying message please, because I love the imagery
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    Mikaella Ocean Well-Known Member

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  4. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    well, thank for reading peeps

    no meaning. just a person watching a boring symphony concert. so he folds up the concert program into paper airplanes and just tosses them around in bordome. in imagery the sounds of the music interact with the planes...nothing too deep just a lil fun short.
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  5. Introvertfl

    Introvertfl New Member

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    The imagery and detail in this piece is astounding. I love when someone can take the observation of an event and turn it into something like this. I also like the fact that you admit that there is no underlying meaning. It's comforting to know that someone can write a poem without some pretentious underlying theme that has no bearing on the piece.

    Wonderful job.
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  6. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    thank you Introvertfl
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  7. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    i am going to make up my own underlying message and teach it to students after you die
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  8. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Well thank you very much Omega Man; you can write the syllabus-and in the message, tell the class that this was the first poem I ever wrote.

    be creative in your underlying message, aye ole laddy.
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  9. StraeBullets

    StraeBullets New Member

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    I'm really digging this piece. Very well done. The imagery is amazing, and the fact that you're detailing something so simple in nature makes it that much more impressive. Much respect...
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  10. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    thank you very much StraeBullets
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