Strippers leave glitter everywhere

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by allnakey, Jan 25, 2011.

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  1. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    Come crashing closer
    Beneath me barely breathing

    Secretly we’ll be secret
    Missing words
    As we Speak them
    Warm like summer
    Skin to skin
    We touch
    We must
    Be alive

    In this bed we lay
    Lay awake today

    Passion must be envious
    test
  2. DethStryque

    DethStryque DethStryque theInvincible

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    I LIKE THIS! Evocative words,imagery rich,and more."Secretly we'll be secret"..."we must be alive...passion must be envious".Well done man.
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  3. ScimonomicS

    ScimonomicS New Member

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    "passion must be envious" is a great image.

    "warm like summer" is a terribly cliched one.

    more of the first one please.
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  4. hearstothemute

    hearstothemute New Member

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    haha, i liked this piece a lot. the beauty in smut; the love in lust.
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  5. J o o k

    J o o k Win your battles before they’ve even been fought.

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    it was warm, enjoyable.
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  6. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    I like the irony with the title and this line "Secretly we’ll be secret"
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  7. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    this was so nice... raw piece.
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  8. flatsound

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    i honestly dug this, seriously, good one.
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