Story Telling = Poetry?

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  1. Magog

    Magog New Member

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    Does this count as poetry as well? I don't wanna post anything I have..I wanna save it for the Poetry Realm in case it does count as a poem..it comes off as more of a story though..peep the first few lines and get at me...


    His fragile mind
    was entwined in turmoil
    thus
    resulting in a migrain
    His emotions
    weren't in the best of condition
    He always wished
    his life would be as that of a utopia
    but will it ever be granted?

    Ya'll see wat i'm sayin? It comes off as a story rather..
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  2. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Yeah man we got all types of that kind of poetry in the realm.
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  3. absolute zero

    absolute zero Among the living

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    i don't know why mind's reply was so damn funny to me.
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  4. Magog

    Magog New Member

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    Probably cuz he was critisizing my post.
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  5. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    lol I wasn't trying to be funny with you.

    As a matter of fact the last two poems I posted (War and War 2) were stories.

    War

    War Part 2



    Yeah though mane, you won't be stepping out of the realm boundary if you post one of your own.
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  6. Anaphora

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    Narrative poetry's the SHIT! However, in this exceprt, there's already like 4 technical errors, and one generally silly line.

    entwined WITH turmoil (or, cut out entwined, can't have them both as they are), migrainE, best of conditionS, The utopia line's just poorly written syntactically, and the question's kind of silly.

    Read some more poetry, but don't stop writing... and make sure you keep an open mind to criticism, otherwise you'll just be another lame kid who thinks his poetry's the best, even though it never gets any better.
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