"Stone"

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  1. Baron Mynd

    Baron Mynd Swaggersaurus Rex

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    Take a concrete thought or idea
    aim to spot the flaws that appear.
    Before you adhere tools of the trade in
    your engineering, view it with patience.
    - Use your creative juices to crack it,
    there’s numerous ways if you just imagine!
    Using a hammer could bring you results
    but if you were to add just a chisel and sculpt
    with unadulterated freedom of thought
    & instinctive impulses leading the course
    it could be so much more given time to perfect it.
    - Clean up the corners and find a direction
    File at each section that’s rough at the edges
    so its lines are connected & done to your credit.
    Study your effort with critical eyes
    looking intensely at which you’ve designed.
    - Is it precise and holding your gaze
    giving new life what you’d hoped to convey?
    If no, strip away at the layers of debris
    ‘til what solely remains the creation you dreamed.
    As great an achievement as you could accomplish
    a shape that’s ideal and yet brutally honest.
    A beautiful homage to original thought
    remove what’s unwanted and rid it of flaws.
    Strip to the core of the subject in essence
    exhibit it purely and cut the excesses.
    So nothing is left but the principle premise
    to sum up the rest and deliver your message.
    See, in the possessive hands of an artist
    this gift of expression comes natural regardless.
    Whether tablet or parchment or what you prefer
    it’s how concrete concepts are turned into bodies of work.
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  2. MrFlux001

    MrFlux001 Member

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    This is the perfect writers anthem. I think much the same way. Great piece with an incredible flow and word choice.
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  3. Baron Mynd

    Baron Mynd Swaggersaurus Rex

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    Much respect, Flux, appreciate the peepage!

    I got you...
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  4. Chase Murda

    Chase Murda hostile enviroment

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    ok ok i liked this one nice flow and it was on point word for word now thats what i like to see on open mic again good job
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