still ventin....

Discussion in 'Open Mic' started by mr.redeyez, Jul 23, 2012.

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  1. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    i'm walkin on sunshine
    no levitation
    herbs get smoked like a gun crime
    no hesitation
    i just earned my first degree,
    its a celebration
    dreams of walkin cross stage
    no graduation
    my granny died, its been 10 days
    salutation'
    aint' that amazin,fuck i'm out of patience
    ready to eat u alive, like i'm Caucasian
    check tha abrasion, i know you u feel it
    i like it bettah when they hatin', cus i'm resilient
    gotta scope on ya,like ya body brazilian
    he crossed me,no its not his religion
    he didnt have a 9,nigga go fishin'
    toss him in tha sea,him and that pot he piss in
    since u a asshole I'll prolly be fistin'
    pause!! my nigga listen,beware of my postion
    i'm 2 girls 1 cup, u 2 niggas kissin.
    gett itt..
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  2. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    I'm Resilient.

    I don't understand how you go from talking about you're walking on sunshine to "my grandmother died" to "2 girls one cup"

    All over the place. I liked the first section up to out of patience. The rhyme scheme was cool, and the content was okay. After that, it was trash.
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  3. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    'i'm walkin on sunshine, no levitation- meanin im high

    and ima shout my granny out in every verse bruh

    and most of that first part is metaphors think about what i mean

    and when i said- i'm 2 girls 1 cup, u 2 niggas kissin

    think about it im sayin im the shit and u gay.
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  4. Resilient.

    Resilient. .. . ..

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    I understand it, retard. Your metaphors are trash. I was being nice by saying the first section was nice. This whole thing is absolute garbage. You aren't good at open mics what so ever. This shouldn't count as an open mic. It's 16 lines are pure, unadulterated, hot garbage.
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