Still vent'in! (lettin my mind breath) feel it

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  1. mr.redeyez

    mr.redeyez Member

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    Take a puff,from tha blunt (watch tha smoke swirl)
    life is tuff, i won't front (fukk tha whole world)
    in my mind i see demon's, mo' stress
    all my life i been dream'in, no stress
    will i awake, or will they kill me to
    bullet hole's in my face,condition critical?
    How much longer will it take?, stop tha pain
    we suffer daily with no break' eternal flame
    i see tha sun'shine, but i'm still weary
    at night i hear tha drum line, it feel eerie
    iz it my time, what i'm think'n as i clear tha gate
    made it home fine, right on time' can i get a plate
    i'm eat'in good, but still feel'n shocked
    i heard it threw tha grape vine," my nigga dropped
    damn..........
    test
  2. T.R.C....

    T.R.C.... New Member

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    ill shit man flow was killer and i like how you structured it you should have kept going with it but still dope keep it up
    test
  3. dsp2k5

    dsp2k5 Dime Sack Pimp

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    nice flow to it homie, i especially liked the ending ... dope
    test
  4. nO gOoD!

    nO gOoD! Life Music :: Press Play

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    dude this was pretty nice. flow was nice..and you had some nice internals there too.

    dope drop
    test
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