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  1. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    The end is inevitable…
    and though it’s the only thing
    I’ve ever been certain of …
    It is here where I find most of my uncertainties
    Sweat beads slowly sliding down
    the sides of my face

    A shell of a man…

    I thought I gripped tight these truths
    But nothing was there when I
    Unclasped my heavy hands

    My problem has always been that

    I wanted him to reveal me a miracle
    As if
    My life and my daughters weren’t
    Evidence enough of something beyond
    The starts dipped in the midnight sky

    Where is it that I was taken

    I still remember the day when I blindly
    Wondered into the once uncharted planes of my
    Seemingly perpetual mind and found
    Strength within “you”

    Admittingly I tried to shake lose but my heart
    Would never let go of what my mind had now
    Firmly grasped

    So I

    tore into the bible as well as
    countless other religious texts
    Until again I found myself…
    Questing the very essence
    Of God, Jesus and the credibility
    Of the authors whose books I read

    It was when I came across the lost gospels of
    Thomas
    Truth
    And Mary Magdalene that I realized

    This could all be a lie

    for some stories Go forever untold
    I’ve tried my hardest not to perceive this
    But this seems to be the only

    illuminated road



    Shall I continue………

    (there is so much more to this…be on the look out for the next part)
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  2. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    Good to see a piece from you again...

    I almost don't know what to say...the way you laid your thoughts out like that made me really get into this piece...I too have tried to find answers by reading the bible but ultimately gave up and am still undecided...I liked how you worked with/on this topic
    as always another great drop

    much love

    peace
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  3. nice piece, kinda took a bit of a twist at the end. I rally liked this part..

    "I still remember the day when I blindly
    Wondered into the once uncharted planes of my
    Seemingly perpetual mind and found
    Strength with “you”

    We all have these questions man, but when you question yourself and divide yourself from maybe doing the right thing, it eats you up inside, well it has done that for me. I could in my mind attempt to dissprove My creator who sent his son to die so i wouldnt have to suffer hell, sure. But it has done me no good, except maybe for a moment turn the guilt away from my life where i strive to be perfect like everyone else and fall short everytime. The illuminati which you speak about is something that in order to succeed must be rid of the belief in Good over evil. The media constantly water down our morals, and norms, our values. These days we have televised wars! Don't be hard on yourself man. These times are completely confusing, and you are not alone, but i ask you this. When you start to side with perhaps abandoning God, how does it make you feel? I think these days are the hardest times to have faith and not let the world make you bitter.

    straight poem man, made me think.
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  4. I thought u said Illuminati but actually you said illuminated, i should read things more closely, but still ...
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  5. allnakey

    allnakey Sex is no fun by yourself

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    "The end is inevitable…
    and though it’s the only thing
    I’ve ever been certain of …
    It is here where I find most of my uncertainties"

    That's a fucking crazy couple of lines man, Brang a huge smile to my face when i read that beautifully put and so true.


    This was a really nice piece, it was nicc how you tried to find some of the answers to life in the bible. That would never work for me tho, I'm big on god and all, but religion is a different think and i know no one wants to hear my thoughts on the bible. So anyways nice piece and any were you can find answers search, cause lifes answers are all at our finger tips, it's just a matter of taking grasp of em and put em together.



    Stay Up, Much love, Peace
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  6. <<interested in your thoughts on the bible
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  7. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    I have to agree with everybody on this was a very excellent piece with the way you laid it down nice work
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  8. MURDERGHOST

    MURDERGHOST New Member

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    great piece of work.......

    i'm interested in reading more.......



    sika....
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  9. da_after_shock

    da_after_shock New Member

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    damn..what can i say..the whole peice was lovely

    for some stories Go forever untold
    I’ve tried my hardest not to perceive this
    But this seems to be the only

    illuminated road

    that though stood out to me like a fat guy in a body building contest..wow
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  10. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    you're almost there....

    one luv
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  11. IDoL ThA WiSE

    IDoL ThA WiSE i am hip hop

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    that was really nice
    cant wait to read more
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  12. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    Damn Poet,
    You killed out on this for real. This is a great piece man. Left me hanging and waiting. I hate you! lol. Everybody needs to peep this, this is hot.

    As the ink flows...peace
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  13. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    preciate it
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  14. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    I could have sworn i replied to this...guess I didnt...however...i loved this! Absolutely wonderful piece....This was deep on a whole different level....tight shit


    mad love
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  15. Oni Mag

    Oni Mag ~~~~~~

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    it was really nice imagery but i wasnt feelin it as much as your previous poems. Dont get me wrong tho it was still a 'lovely' peice lol. Aiight L...Outz
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  16. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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  17. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    on the reals that was ill it was deep, i was feeling it
    uno
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  18. DaJackle

    DaJackle ThoughtS ProcessinG

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    i really liked this, though we are not the same religion, it is something that i've been through...i was borned into a religion...not by my choice, and i know that i have a choice in the end...the one rights that God gave us....choice....when i was old enough to understand stuff, i started questioning stuff...and when i finally made that choice, to accept the religion, i feel whole....good piece man, like brit said...our world right now is totally upside down...and the only thing that could hold our morals together are our family and personal belief....this is a great piece man, made me think...i really like how you organized this one...the one liner gave the whole poem a driving force to move poems....stay up man
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  19. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    really appreciate that^
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  20. IvyG

    IvyG New Member

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    I really liked this piece .. especially the ending.. <3
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