Stereo-Type

Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by MC Radical, May 24, 2003.

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  1. MC Radical

    MC Radical twitter.com/TheLastHero69

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    Apple doesn’t fall far from the tree,
    Not a precise incision,
    I make my own decisions.
    If we all would make mistakes
    And everyone committed the same
    If learning is just what it takes
    Then there would be no shame.
    Stereotype that: white is rich,
    The black is poor
    Then certainly you are a fool
    And if you stereotype me
    You didn’t go to school.
    The hark-knock lesson must be learned
    That if you play with fire you will get burned.
    If every son was like his father
    And every daughter just like her mother
    Then we would all be racists
    Women would stay home and cook
    Men would be plain sexists.
    Don’t underestimate the nerdy look
    You get more then expected
    When you mistakenly overlook.
    test
  2. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    I do not know...

    ...for me, the meaning was there...though maybe was 'worked' a bit too much...and therefore fell here and there...

    ...yet it still 'shone' strong...especially with some of the lines that kept it all very much 'alive'...

    ....resp...
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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I thought that it lacked metaphors and similies, as well as any indepth meaning. Well, sure, the definition of stereotypes were there, but where was your voice in this? I just thought a dictionary or another individual wrote this down from what he heard before and not he really thinks. Next piece you drop, be sure to think of your own voice and act like you're talking to the reader. Deliverance makes a complete difference in your work. My blessings..
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  4. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    yeah this poem title caught my eye

    We just talked about this subject a few weeks ago in school....I think its a serious issue that is often overlooked

    I like the idea/concept of this

    could of been written better but hey I liked it
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  5. MC Radical

    MC Radical twitter.com/TheLastHero69

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    Aite yall, I'll try to work on this piece. I know I messed up on this one, expect better ones from me!
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