[Steal A Seed] Defcon_5 Vs. Got Life? (Defcon Wins)

Discussion in 'RSTL Grudge Matches and Tournaments' started by Lucifa, Nov 10, 2008.

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  1. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Rules:
    Defcon_5 MUST post first
    12-64 Lines
    Verses Due By Friday
    Got Life? can PM me his Verse/Link or post himself
    Voting Open To Everybody
    Feedback From Voters MUST Be At Least 2 Lines Per Writer To Qualify

    Defcon_5 MUST write to at least 1 of the following topics:

    She's The One

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    "Appreciation is a wonderful thing. It makes what is excellent in others belong to us as well."
    - Voltaire
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  2. Defcon_5

    Defcon_5 Relax and take notes

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  3. Got Life?

    Got Life? Resident Megalomaniac

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    shame that i have to recycle, but you're still a dead duck in the water.
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  4. Defcon_5

    Defcon_5 Relax and take notes

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    editing my verse in here..will be a lil late but not to late
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  5. Defcon_5

    Defcon_5 Relax and take notes

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    "Appreciation is a wonderful thing. It makes what is excellent in others belong to us as well."
    - Voltaire


    Dear RSTL,

    First let me apologize, i know my actions were unwarranted
    i really just wanted the world to see the greatness of your performances
    i never wanted this, all the fame and the attention
    and this is just the part of it all that i forgot to mention
    i revered your works, stared daily at your heart's passions
    but i showed my appreciation to your greatness in an odd fashion
    my distraught actions brought me shame and hard lashings
    and for years i sat in misery and pain before i could start laughing
    for what it's worth i never did what i did maliciously
    it's just your ficticious writtens were everything i dreamed to be
    now things seem to be back on the right course but i might force
    a line or two that's similar but u can't say that it's just like yours
    my might's more..i've turned into a God from a laughing stock
    mastered plots and dominated the boards without so much as a battle drop
    this atrocious act of which i speak of is something of a local legend
    when i simply "borrowed" most of your work, edited and wrote the rest in
    i hope you get it, what i did was not from my personal greed
    it was done with the hope that people would agree they were perfect to read
    and the responses received came with the upmost respect
    it gave me stars to shoot for and fame i could only hope to get
    the pros and vets all combined in one continuous blog
    i always thought my intentions would be as simple to all..
    ..as they were to me but all u returned was the third degree
    even as i tried to explain that i didn't bite the pieces purposely
    well i'll rephrase that, i didn't bite them, i gave the world a gift
    but it was only in my mind, i lost respect and honestly i'm hurting still
    in the end i'm still here..fighting hard to erase the diversity
    i'm living proof that u can still chase your dreams in the face of adversity
    and to all those who "contributed" to my early royalties
    you're all hero's to me, and you have my everlasting loyalty
    my praise ir your praise, my victory is your victory
    let's let bygons be bygons and work together to erase the history
    everything i've said is the truth i've put it on the line
    please understand that all in all, i wanted us all to shine


    Sincerely,your friend
    Got Life
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  6. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Julian sat and watched consumed as death just loomed,
    Over his grandmother, anxious before her breath resumed,
    She was his anchor, the very pillar of strength in his life,
    Holding him at no more then arm's length through the strife,
    As the cancer just mangled and devoured every organ,
    Weakly, she smiled, proud of Julian working for JP Morgan,
    For it was she that raised him after his parents tragic death,
    Courtesy of a drug addict twisted high of crystal meth,
    But he was the product of the upbringing she deamed fit,
    Never allowing him to quit, she seemed to esteemed to hit,
    Yet if you ask Julian, he'll tell you of the belts and switches,
    The welts under britches, the pelts and the niches,
    Instilling in him a military regime, you dress, you clean,
    No mess, keep running, you need to stay impossibly lean,
    Indeed, she created a machine, a collegiate competitor,
    Mr. poster child of overcoming, of "I'm feeling better sir."
    Although now wasn't a scene he could control or alter,
    As he keeps trying to break the bells toll, but seems to falter,
    Grandma's only seventy three pounds now, nothing left,
    How hard he wept, seeing her sulken flesh lay there bereft-
    Of emotions, of color...and that ocean of commotion,
    Soon faded away, faded to grey, he was lost within devotion,
    Broken by the angst and anger of his remaining family gone,
    Angered by her lack of fight, she seemed so withdrawn,
    He broke down and cried that night, got drunk started a fight,
    Dangled a man by his neck, killed him, and felt life respite...

    He felt the blood rush to his face again,
    The swelling of his arms, the fear of men,
    Life made sense and then,
    It all became clear, they need him...

    How many innocent grandmas had died, fallen to cancer,
    It's a rhetorical question so of course there's no answer,
    But in his mind Julian saw a conclusion that put him at ease,
    Euthanasia with a twist of genocide became his disease,
    The way he saw it was if he took a serated blade,
    And played with the handle as it so meticuloulsy flayed-
    A person over 60 or generally someone approaching the end,
    He was not a demon, a killer, he was acting as a friend,
    Seemingly believing that this would mean no suffering,
    So he took the sharpened blade, kissed it, felt the sting,
    Finally going out hunting, letting his new found focus roam,
    Pacing frantically, his mind no longer part of a happy home,
    Until he saw her, she was perfect, practically heaven sent,
    Knees weak, spine slightly bent, a look of torment,
    She had given up, he saw her as content with lament,
    This is something he vowed that he would prevent...

    So he drugged her,
    He drag her,
    He stabbed her to death,
    Ever scream bringing back life, emanting a breath,
    Deeper than any she had had in years,
    It brought him happiness in the form of tears...

    He would later bathe in that tub with her still inside,
    Her boiling blood keeping him warm from the cold world outside,
    And he would drink from that tub, to the memory of her life,
    A memory that glimmered in her eyes as he flashed her the knife,
    It was his turn now to pay hommage and lay her to rest,
    Laying cement and stones down, building a tomb above her chest.

    He lived off these moments until the next one came along,
    And he'd approach them knife in hand, simply singing this song...

    "Your head is humming and it won't go in case you don't know
    The piper's calling you to join him
    Dear lady can't you hear the wind blow and did you know
    Your stairway lies on the whispering wind"


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    The last 4 bars are from Stairway to Heaven by Led Zepplin
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  7. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Q has double checked with his 'correct settings' ..

    TIME CHECK
    Board Time: 11-14-2008, 11:29 PM
    Actual Time: 11-14-2008, 10:59 PM

    Vote deduction reversed.
    Starts at 0-0
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  8. PERTAiN2LiFE

    PERTAiN2LiFE sheesh the rapper

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    Fuck this is hard. I really think this is a too close to truly call.

    Defcon_5 - Verse was dirty. I liked it a lot. I thought the idea was dope but halfway through it needed a new flip/idea to keep it fresh because it did get a little repetitive.

    Got Life? - Solid storytelling. Started off awkward for me, just how I felt. Some of the ideas were cliche for movies, however, in text they have a completely different feel and sense. I think they worked well. Liked the Zepp quote.

    So since, I really think this is a tie, I will vote for Defcon this way it's tied for now. Great job.
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  9. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Def - lmao .. this was a good verse .. you managed to make it not feel corny and that is a hard thing to pull off considering what you did here .. the flip of doing that with the quote was pretty slick .. it took about a 3rd of the verse for me to click on to where it was going and even though I knew what it was leading to I didn't not want to read on .. the writing was a pretty good standard with a steady flow creating a smooth read with inners helping that along .. overall I enjoyed the read ..

    GL? - as I never really bother to read an opponents verse .. this is the first time that I have read this peice .. when I went to grab it I re-read the match and I could see why the votes were split and your win was only by a margin .. I was surprised you thought this was the best verse to opt for .. for me .. it wasn't one of you better works .. it was written well enough but I just couldn't get in to it .. I found it a little dull .. not boring as such .. just dull .. maybe it's something that is influenced by the mood of the reader .. the writing is arguably a higher standard than Defcon .. especially where vocab is concerned .. but the content just didn't grab me ..

    maybe it's cos it's early in the morning here .. but the light-hearted tone of Def's piece appealed to me most in this match up .. whilst Got's higher calibre writing is there to see I just didn't get in to his content like others will/did .. I dunno .. Got Life can bemoan this vote all he likes .. but on simple appeal to me right now ..

    Vote = Defcon_5 ..
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  10. Lucifa

    Lucifa Viva La Eva

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    Def - lmao .. this was a good verse .. you managed to make it not feel corny and that is a hard thing to pull off considering what you did here .. the flip of doing that with the quote was pretty slick .. it took about a 3rd of the verse for me to click on to where it was going and even though I knew what it was leading to I didn't not want to read on .. the writing was a pretty good standard with a steady flow creating a smooth read with inners helping that along .. overall I enjoyed the read ..

    GL? - as I never really bother to read an opponents verse .. this is the first time that I have read this peice .. when I went to grab it I re-read the match and I could see why the votes were split and your win was only by a margin .. I was surprised you thought this was the best verse to opt for .. for me .. it wasn't one of you better works .. it was written well enough but I just couldn't get in to it .. I found it a little dull .. not boring as such .. just dull .. maybe it's something that is influenced by the mood of the reader .. the writing is arguably a higher standard than Defcon .. especially where vocab is concerned .. but the content just didn't grab me ..

    maybe it's cos it's early in the morning here .. but the light-hearted tone of Def's piece appealed to me most in this match up .. whilst Got's higher calibre writing is there to see I just didn't get in to his content like others will/did .. I dunno .. Got Life can bemoan this vote all he likes .. but on simple appeal to me right now ..

    Vote = Defcon_5 ..
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