~Soulless To You~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    In reponse to them and him (subliminal)

    i was told...
    it didnt make sense for one
    to have a soul...
    if he didnt believe in a
    creator...
    so i was
    told...

    then away with
    my morals...
    my emotional and
    intellectual nature...
    for those elements were my
    soul's creator(maker?)...
    now the most essential part of me
    is no more...now labeled
    suprious...
    to a person whom hasnt quite found
    himself yet...
    i hold an ill will to
    those...
    who try to criticize how i
    tend to grow...
    for we walk on
    different roads...
    we may go through
    similar struggles...
    but in the end my curves will always be sharper
    than yours...
    squeeze into my
    weary shoes...
    and see if it's an easy
    walk through....a mile later
    until then i'll be Mind
    Soulless to you...
    never again shall i be the stock
    of your ridicule....
    venting lane...



    Continued...
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  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    In reponse to them and him (subliminal)

    I sat for a while thinking
    and eventually found myself reaching
    beyond the stars dipped
    in the midnight sky again while
    others contemplate their reason for being
    as if it were not chizzeled atop the weary
    hearts of so called soulless men
    free your mind....
    dont allow past experiences to
    baricade the truth from coming in
    i shared with you my thoughts not as
    teacher...but as a trusting friend
    lately i've been in heavy pursit of reality
    and i swear that i can almost reach out
    and pull it in....
    i was just hopeing to share this treasure
    but i guess its better that i keep it from those
    unwilling to comprehend...

    open your eyes!

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  3. illpoetical

    illpoetical raising the bar everyday

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    that was ill i liked it
    uno
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  4. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    i hold an ill will to
    those...
    who try to criticize how i
    tend to grow...
    for we walk on
    different roads...
    we may go through
    similar struggles...
    but in the end my curves will always be sharper
    than yours...


    The whole piece was tight as hell...just the shit i needed to read right now...your writing always lets me know that i am not alone...i loved this piece...the concept was dope, the style was great...and u expressed your thoughts wonderfully....shit was off the hook!!

    mad love
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  5. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    --------> whistles loudy.. great . and i like the name mind soulless
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  6. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    this whole peice i can relate to and it made it feel like misspimp said that im not alone...great work...id loved to quote but then id have to chose..so i wont..nice work
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  7. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    i hold an ill will to
    those...
    who try to criticize how i
    tend to grow...
    for we walk on
    different roads...
    we may go through
    similar struggles...
    but in the end my curves will always be sharper
    than yours...
    ^^^
    so so so DOPE.....ahhhhh.....

    this reminds me of something from an essay ive read before.....im thinking it was henry david thoreau but im not quite sure.....it was something about marching differently and that nobody is wrong, its just that we march to the beat of a different drummer.......

    much love and respect
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  8. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    As I always say, you dont have to believe in it for it to believe in you...You could not believe in love, but love will still be there, and feme hit it correctly by what she said, that we are all marching, nobody is doing anything wrong, but we are all marching to the beat of a different Drum, that's a good way of putting it. The views of one, no matter how hard they weigh on the heart, does not shape or mold who you really are and should be, so as you said, you remain Mind, Soulless to somebody else, but you know, and that's what counts right? Sure he tried to enlighten you, but when it comes down to it he only offended you, so he learns that you cant always help everybody by trying to influence them with the way you live your life, and you cant exactly force your opinion on them...Anyway, I feel like I am rambling, so lemme stop....Keep ya head up...1, ohh yeah, poem off the hook, as usual though...1
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  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    i've always been willin to comprehend, think you should question yourself on that there. anywho good response.

    good input feme and xero...thanks for the love

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  10. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    u took that shit tottaly out of hand..as i said in the poem..i told u that shit as a friend...i wasnt trying to inlighten u..i was just bringing up the question....if your ass was so offended by what i said..u should have said something...honestly i was pretty dissapointed by u posting this instead of just saying something to a mothafucka...i thought we was cooler then that..but i see how shit is...

    i've always been willin to comprehend, think you should question yourself on that there

    smh....like i said..u took this shit the wrong way....I have never and will never try to tell you that u need to belive in God or that your belifs are stupid, or that i was right and u wrong....this shit is crazy man...and i honeslty would not been half as upset if u woulda just taken the time to tell me about this shit instead of running off and posting this....
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  11. marc antony

    marc antony It's all about da ass....

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    squeeze into my
    weary shoes...
    and see if it's an easy
    walk through....a mile later
    until then i'll be Mind
    Soulless to you...
    never again shall i be the stock
    of your ridicule....
    venting lane...

    ^^^na na na na - na na na na- HEY HEY HEY - good poem!!!


    oooh i feel a poem comin on....
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  12. SexyChica4Real

    SexyChica4Real I am your greatest desire

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    I hate the way you got continued at the end. No I want more. LOL> All in all, i love it, now please continue. LOL
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  13. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Fool you think this whole piece is just about you? No read the very first line..."To them and him...This piece goes way beyond then what me and you have talked about. The only real part directed towards you was the first part, when we had that convo...that's what inspired the piece here. You aint the only somebody who i done had conflict of beliefs with man. This piece here was inevitable, not cause you said something that made me mad, when you told me that i took that as an inspiration no way i'm takin it out of hand. I think that's you there with all your cussin and shit seem like you the mad one not me...This was already in the makin here....You can take it how you want it though. But like i said only the first part was directed towards you, the rest is me goin at the other indiviuals(sp) who i done had conflicts of beliefs with.

    That's all i gotta say in this thread, you know my aim...dont blow it up.

    last up
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  14. SIZZLA

    SIZZLA New Member

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    never again shall i be the stock
    of your ridicule....
    venting lane...


    RAW~
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  15. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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  16. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    ohh boy, see, yall two need to quit it...really yall do, imma sit down and coucil yall, emmhmm...
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  17. Predator INC

    Predator INC New Member

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    aah very beautiful work brother. peace.
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  18. Wicked5744

    Wicked5744 Last I awoke, it was morn

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    Poetic debate in here I see. I liked the poem a lot. The concept was there and you're getting the point across very nicely. Keep the ink flowin...peace.
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  19. StubbilyMug

    StubbilyMug DayorDollar Records

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    ellipsis carry the poem away more than it would have on its own--does it mimick your thought nature especially on such things
    you come off sounding a bit adolescent though
    like an unconfident pussy

    nice
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  20. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    ^^I have to agree with you I liked it
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