~Soulless To You: Torn Remorse~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    A keystyle


    To hurt another heart
    was only healing
    for me...
    the gift was to make love
    to them until
    they fell for me...my sandy brown eyes
    hiding behind
    soaken ebony...
    a slick tongue i stole from
    an absent daddy...
    had them eatin out of the palm of my hands
    if i saw it necessary...
    had them screamin my name, while their nails
    dug into my back for comfort
    and security....
    and when i lost desire
    had them on
    bloody knees...
    begging for my mercy...
    i held it in my hands
    and waved it in their face for
    a tease...
    the curse came once i found
    it addicting...
    to ruin a heart so
    lustfully...
    i begun to question
    my humanity...
    luckily shyness started to
    overwhelm me...
    but the hatred still lurked around
    inside of me...so i continued
    to play with minds
    and torture hearts
    out of pain...
    because of a memory i can see so clearly
    just as it's first day...
    yeah it's his blood, and i'm becoming acquainted
    with his cowardly ways...
    laughin now when the deed
    is done...cryin later
    when haunting memories
    come...
    i'm trapped between self hatred
    and remorse....
    but love myself even more...with the thought of each
    heart i've torn....startin to lose faith
    in these words...
    my words..
    then she came to me
    no longer was
    there a curse...no longer was i soulless
    she saw a heart, and it belong
    to her....



    Continued
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  2. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    the piece itself was dope...but i'm trying now to piece the two poems together...be back
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  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    very impressive malik its rare to find a great poem that is oh so graphic the imagery was gory but done well .
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  4. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    loved this......love all your stuff.......but its 4am and you know how i am around this time......i will be back....
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  5. 49th Prophet

    49th Prophet Dark Magic Inferno

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    "To hurt another heart
    was only healing
    for me..."

    Damn...really feelin those lines...

    Cant believe this, as most of your work, is keystyle, so strong this piece is...can't say exactly why but it felt like it hit home asI read it...

    nice work as always

    much love

    peace
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  6. misspimp

    misspimp a.k.a KATURAH

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    So glad u finally posted something....i loved this piece right here! This shit was deep...the message was off the hook...i really loved this piece...as i love all of your pieces....great poem!!!!

    but love myself even more...with the thought of each
    heart i've torn....

    ^^^Now that some shit right there!

    mad love
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  7. hiphop4govener2

    hiphop4govener2 Active Member

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    Ehhh... Pretty fucking wack if you ask me. Keep practicing though your shit needs plenty of work.
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  8. Dark_Angel

    Dark_Angel Dark_Angel

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    loved this peice, i spose the realm is open to all ^^^opinions...but personally im loving it, im trying to fit it in with the other one that had the same name, but this had great imagery and although gory, it worked so well

    "the curse came once i found
    it addicting...
    to ruin a heart so
    lustfully..."

    ^fav
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  9. TrufDXaggerator

    TrufDXaggerator New Member

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    I dont kno wether to call you a pimp or a player. I'll jus stick to a really good poet. Dis is real and i wonder how many really relate. You got a lil different style than wut ive seen different is always good in my book.
    Truthfully Speakin and Truf Fully Spittin OUT
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  10. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    He said it before I could, it's like the Diary of a Pimp...But, I think I caught the connection between the two, maybe one you didnt intend on either...But all beliefs are based on one, that we are...if we arent, then we dont exist. But we exist because of purpose, and that purpose is ours to discover. The last one, Mind, Soulless to you, was about the soul, this one of the heart...I dunno, but anyway, as always, you came correct...1
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  11. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    thanks for the love

    last up
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  12. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    a slick tongue i stole from
    an absent daddy...
    ^^^
    i liked

    this whole piece was divine there was not a single word wasted....imagery was like woah, and beautiful use of language.....good theme.....one of my favourites from you in awhile....[heart]
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  13. eatemup

    eatemup New Member

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    dam this was tight yo nice drop
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  14. Nebulaz

    Nebulaz fear God, not man

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    he summed it up.
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  15. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    uh huh i see how it is ... neb can reply in malik's poem but not mine. alright...


    anyway uppin for mind^^^:>
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