SLAM FINALS: Judges

Discussion in 'Writer's Block' started by UFO the Phoenix, Jun 11, 2005.

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  1. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    I don't really care what people think of me B?

    but I am a man of my word and I'm gonna see this Slam to the end

    so just chill


    Nimrod and Akon please vote if you still down if not you will be replaced
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  2. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    And what makes you think I give a shit if you care what I think?

    And, If you were a man of your word you would have been here on time to finish your slam.

    However, the slam IS over regardless if the other 5 vote or not...The integrity of the entire slam has been ruined ...Now, It's just some bullshit.
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  3. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    oh my damn. Just get seven new judges, yo.
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  4. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    I can't believe ya'll making such a big deal out of this. If you want judges to judge this put it out for the general public and ask them to vote. Keep up all this bickering and what not and I'm going to pull my poem.
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  5. Bhitiah

    Bhitiah Powerful Scriptures

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    UFO's ass is still waiting for the 5 no show judges...Like a dumb ass...

    I agree with Johnnie French, If ya'all want your poems to be judged how they deserve to be judged IM somebody and ask them to vote...

    Cause obvioulsly, It's just too much to handle for UFO
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  6. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    lol....I didnt think it be that big of a deal but nobody cares anymore

    I will leave this open until I get 5 more judges...old or new

    open to the public
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  7. Madpoet

    Madpoet why is this so short....

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    Sorry I had issues..


    1-10 and I apologise but Im the critic


    realms

    I think the only thing worth a piss in your piece was the choice of wording and emotion. I felt your pacing was slow, it didnt rhyme *and to me I look for rhyme*, I think you didnt really get to the point of where you were going in this piece.
    Did you even know where you were going with this piece?
    But your last line was nice.

    Cause then it was over...LOL kiddin..no the last line was nice

    Score-4

    Absolute Zero

    You had 2 or 4 lines that stuck out. I dont think you really took this much of anywhere. Not as long dragging as realms and it was short. I think had you been more specific I think it would have given you more points for it. It didnt rhyme and wasnt very deep. Better than realms but not much
    Score-4.5

    Poetickz -

    I like this. I felt it had some emotion to it and while simple it rhymed nicely nd appropriatly, i felt it had more writers voice than the first two. but compared to fare Ive seen on your good days..this was horseshit. I love the prison metaphors and maybe cause this is a rap board but good shit
    Score-6.5 (kill kill kill the white man [funny])

    Nislanif-

    Long but ladies and gentleman we have our winner.Amazing insight and flow, tremendous verbal agility. Impressive , you almost made the first 3 look like children wrote them. You actually told a story througout. Join the RSTL

    Score - 8.9

    Rikoshay-

    Another talented writers steps in this bitch. I feel you took third place. Always a consistant writer , You have a werid way of flowin but it works and you told a story I could mostly follow...Im supposed to be in bed and im tired so thats it for now..Let the score reflect what i feel

    Score -8.2

    Johnnie French-

    Im amazed Im gonna say what i am gonna say. You would take second place. Rhyming or not, so much insight and wisdom, so much emotion and writers voice involved in your piece. It didnt rhyme but you overcompensated in other areas..Like I said Im tired let the score refelct

    Score-8.6
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  8. Nimrod

    Nimrod Nimi Hendrix

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    Realms....

    impressive, i'm goin to give you a 7, and use you as a point of reference for the rest of the poets........


    7




    absolute zero...

    a shorter poem, but i was feeling the content a little more

    7.5



    poeticks

    feeling this one a lot, i could relate to it 100%

    8





    nislanif

    superior imagery, feeling this the most so far, very well written and thought out


    9




    rikoshay

    ur rhyme scheme is insane, seems more advanced than most poetry i've read with the multiples and all that, do u rap?

    felt ur shit a lot, but dont feel the topic was as well crafted otherwise as nislanif's


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    johnnie french

    lovin the history, real nice one

    felt it was close between you and nislanif for the victory

    i'd probably give him the slight nod though, but thats based on personal preference, very well done


    8.5



    in conclusion, i was feeling nislanif's the most

    perfectly written, as all the rest were, but what i felt seperated it from the rest was the imagery, the well crafted topic, easy to grasp, very relative, yet written ingeniously


    good shit from all though
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  9. v-Dynamo Kidd-v

    v-Dynamo Kidd-v Dynamite

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    Realms - ok for the most part i enjoyed reading this, its flowed along very smoothly which is probly the thing i like most about this poem. nothing really stood out for me though but thats not really a bad thing, like i said before everything went together nicely so i couldn't really pick out any lines as my favorite. overall a solid piece so i'll give it a 6

    Absolute Zero - now this i really enjoyed, i only wish that it could have been longer. i liked how you add those words on the side, it split the stanzas rather nicely. content wise i was feeling just about every line. my favorite lines were
    Caressing the crevices for shelter,
    And leaving my near future, submissive,


    overall i really liked this poem so i'm gonna give it a 8 again i just wished it could of been longer

    Poetickz - i liked the repetitive lines starting each stanza off

    sittin on a greyhound goin northbound
    breakin free from my chains that for so long have detained me
    escaping the boundaries of parental slavery
    finally free from the abuse i received since a baby


    that stanza there rather hit home peronally for me. the whole piece read smoothly and i didn't have to reread anything which i liked. overall this was a very solid piece so i'm gonna give this an 8.5

    NisLaniF - damn what can be said about this. alright first off reading in order this is my favorite poem in here. everything just went perfectly.

    Sometimes, he calls it his own funeral procession.
    “No one walks with me, I’m every day by myself


    for some reason while reading this those lines just jumped out at me along with alot of others but i don't have room to list all of them. overal i was really feeling this piece so 9

    RIKOSHAY - i've never read a poem by you before but i will say i was very impressed. everything about it just blended together with a alot of standout lines i liked in particular. overal this was very well written 9

    Johnnie French - Another very solid piece. everything about this one also just went together nicely.

    In my dreams I cry…
    Not tears of joy… not to be happy… I just cry…
    As you see me sitting on a pile of everyone who has died by violence…
    My tears will never reach the bottom…
    Dreams…


    the ending just finished it perfectly. very solid piece 8.5
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  10. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    good thing I ain't decide to pull my poem. I was gon' back out and judge the rest. [funny]
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  11. Nimrod

    Nimrod Nimi Hendrix

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    damn, my vote is all fucked up


    my comp was laggin while i was typing, and i think i pasted shit in the wrong spot and all that


    let me edit it so its more coherent
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  12. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Am I correct in assessing we are two votes away from finishing this?
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  13. DiC GeTs GuLLy

    DiC GeTs GuLLy Hello

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    sorry yall, been busy celebrating my birthday and beefin with Insense and Pent Up.... w/e tho

    I may get to read this tonight and post a vote a later.....
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  14. Johnnie French

    Johnnie French Voodooradio.podomatic.com

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    Man come on as someone who's suppose to be leading this gig you can't make statements like that. Saying something like that makes it look like you didn't and don't care and this was like Bhi said a waste of everyone's time. If you don't care then I suggest not doing anymore events like this.
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  15. Pent uP

    Pent uP I'd Like to Fight Ten Men

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    I think you are all retarded for wiggin out


    pz
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  16. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    I do care

    I need one more judge to vote

    then I will rap this up with the results

    thanks to everyone who came thru and stuck it out dispite the shaky outcome....arguing solves nothing....

    I will wait
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  17. UFO the Phoenix

    UFO the Phoenix I DONT BELIEVE IN ALIENS!

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    I do care

    I need one more judge to vote

    then I will rap this up with the results

    thanks to everyone who came thru and stuck it out dispite the shaky outcome....arguing solves nothing....

    I will wait
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  18. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    what ever happened to Feme Sole?
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  19. yea, she would def vote for you
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  20. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    Apparently, so would anyone else, but at least she would have voted...
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