Short Poem - I'm not gonna make up some abstract title that'll persuade you to read.

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  1. LOGiC

    LOGiC Guest

    "In unopened eyes, you'll find what is there"


    The shape of love, doesn't fit my heart -
    But I earn heart, in the way I love.. I hate to crush;
    Think this girls` the start of me; I feel hopeless
    A seal broken; A real token - spent
    A dent of 'life', - A seal floatin' in the Ocean of love...
    ... 'n then Killed; stolen the will of feeling Open; Its tough..
    I'm still goin' through rough times, I'd love to quit.
    I must admit ...with the peices of my broken heart - You make the puzzle fit.
    I kneel, focused; Holding a chance;
    An oppurtunity; But only noticed Unspoken -
    So you look over & glance; 'n feel Nothing.. Nothing is felt..
    A real notion, that busted & felt Something - but nothing was there,
    Amoungst in the air - HE.. HE whom was there for nothing..

    ...shadowed love to stair - and now its all up to you - "The Eye Of The Beholder"
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  2. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    i really liked this it was differebt but cool ^
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  3. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    I'm relating to this somewhat with what happened today, so I'm feeling you in what you were trying to say, no doubt. I was digging your organizational aspect of the piece and how you formatted it so well, so it begin reading how you want the listener/reader to have read it, yam sayin'? Overall, respectable piece, a complete relative to what I'm feeling as of today and probably for a while longer. My blessings..
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  4. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    i agree...a lot of stuff in this lil piece...def feeling it...creative...would like for u to title it though.....
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  5. LOGiC

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    ^ wrd, i'll take mine from now on.


    Its my first poem i've written in a really long time - I'm trying to get my writing skills back, so I can have some spoken word on my upcoming album.
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  6. nice 1..title ya work if ya can..;-)

    stay up
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