Shoot me

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  1. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    verse

    forget college, ima get the last laugh
    call me the SAT's, I'm a test you cant pass
    Bring the best ya ass has, ill fuckin blast that
    ya ass crack will shat black as you learn I'm toxic, call Hazmat
    you dont understand, i'm a wonder man
    i get pissed and the sky will rumble man worse than thunder can
    if i dont try on a verse its not worth under a hundred grand
    i aint talkin plunders man, when i say if you piss me off I'll sunder Grams
    i need to be shot, bleeding or to stop breathing
    if you want the top spot free then pray i flop, pleading
    stop the top dog from breeding or my seeds will always be leading
    im through the ceiling cuz expectations I'm exceeding
    I'm more fucked than the Haight Ashbury
    fuck with me and get your lame ass burried
    when i go inside your mind yo, time goes
    by slow til i go pyro and ignite your eyes, ho ass wide load

    hook

    Shoot me
    I'ma be a thorn in your side
    king of the world that i was born in to die
    So Shoot me
    Go informin ya guy
    I'll go Foreman and blind fist absorbed in ya eye
    Shoot me
    I'ma be the king of the throne
    Standin way up high on the peak's top alone
    So Shoot me
    better bring ya revolver
    cuz you brain dead fucks are gonna need a problem solver
    Shoot me

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    Ive made this matrix of greatness
    i spray this blatant hate mixed with statements
    of braveness, not only am i saying depraved shit
    but deep shit about my flaws, you wouldnt say this
    i got a love/hate with rap
    cuz most rappers are so mundane and bland
    always talkin about gun play and crack
    when you spent your sundays in mass
    doubt my hunger? you need to know me then
    im starving like a motherfuckin Ethiopian
    leaving ho's beaten, bleeding, drinkin semen
    fiending, gleamin, my wave defeatin sea men
    tsunami the poonani of a cool mami
    Fool Ronnie? the crew will go bukake and share loads like a true commie
    im on my way to some green and plus things so come plead
    you need to suck me and suck seeds to succeed you dumb freak

    hook

    Shoot me
    I'ma be a thorn in your side
    king of the world that i was born in to die
    So Shoot me
    Go informin ya guy
    I'll go Foreman and blind fist absorbed in ya eye
    Shoot me
    I'ma be the king of the throne
    Standin way up high on the peak's top alone
    So Shoot me
    better bring ya revolver
    cuz you brain dead fucks are gonna need a problem solver
    Shoot me

    verse

    in my rhyming sentence my insight be present
    you will in time be stressin as i make my blinding entrance
    into the line, be checkin cuz i define a veteran
    testing the top of the line, youll get slapped and repent then
    get the T.a.C attack, crack the back and stab the fag
    and have to grab the strap and blast the man
    but id rather grab the pen and write than end ya life
    or pretend to like you as a friend, you kike
    who writes like this? no one
    think you're better? show them
    wanna play? go run
    or suck my dick and lick my scrotum
    youre so done and i am too with this nonsense
    its constant, dog, you are not dope, not sick
    when i go off its toxic, when i make moves its boss shit
    piss me off and its likely I'll relaunch Auschwitz

    hook

    Shoot me
    I'ma be a thorn in your side
    king of the world that i was born in to die
    So Shoot me
    Go informin ya guy
    I'll go Foreman and blind fist absorbed in ya eye
    Shoot me
    I'ma be the king of the throne
    Standin way up high on the peak's top alone
    So Shoot me
    better bring ya revolver
    cuz you brain dead fucks are gonna need a problem solver
    Shoot me




    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1251862-allow-me-introduce-myself.html
    http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1251486-can-t-win.html
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  2. bagglad

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    peep---http://board.rapmusic.com/open-mic/1252655-accustomed-bravery.html

    a little long could be a good song doe keep theme coming love this part

    i aint talkin plunders man, when i say if you piss me off I'll sunder Grams
    i need to be shot, bleeding or to stop breathing
    if you want the top spot free then pray i flop, pleading
    stop the top dog from breeding or my seeds will always be leading
    im through the ceiling cuz expectations I'm exceeding
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  3. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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  4. Radical Sun

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    HAHAHAHA! Nice.
    Lot of tight lines in this, nice flow, multi's - cool hook.
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  5. bagglad

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  6. Ace the Prophet

    Ace the Prophet A Prophet to the Game

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    What up Tacky? Thought this was cool. Good lines, flow mighta been stretched in some parts but I didn't put it to a track so it's no biggie. I thought some shit you said just to make it rhyme (mostly in the first verse) but you got your point across. Thought it was a cool concept being that with the title I expected it to be a track where you're down on yourself, so I dug that, haha. Overall it was good though. I liked it. Keep it up. 1
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  7. N A S T Y

    N A S T Y Well-Known Member

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    flow was choppy, lyrics were on point.... you've come a long way slapnuts
    good shit
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  8. Ithaca City

    Ithaca City New Member

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    got alot of tight verses, shit is dope
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  9. the omega man

    the omega man so, it goes

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    "call me the SAT's, I'm a test you cant pass"
    You gotta be a dumb mother fucker if u can't pass the SAT's...bad punchline

    Hazmat line was cool

    I like the hook...I'd really like to hear it on a track though. I am imagining how I would do it but I wanna know how you intended it to be done.

    The second verse is kind of plain. I like the rhyming, its just not lyrical enough for me. I bet it its a sick ass audio track though I can just tell.

    O I like the true commie part too.
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  10. IgloS

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    TAC dawg.. youre tryin to be way to G.. lol.. It's cool.. some sick flows and rhymeschemes in this for sure.. def has a battle verse braggadocio feel to it.. I thought it was pretty soild.. maybe to a dope west coast beat.. props
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  11. JASON ANTHONY

    JASON ANTHONY White Devil

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    im through the ceiling cuz expectations I'm exceeding


    ^
    Can't stand when rappers construct a bar like this to make it rhyme.

    Sick song dude. Multi's and punchlines were on point. Get a mic, faggot.
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  12. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    you know you loved that line.

    are you gonna tell me to get a mic after everything i drop? lmao

    thanks though.
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  13. JASON ANTHONY

    JASON ANTHONY White Devil

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    That line made me want to take a pipe bender to my dick and fuck myself.
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  14. Tacky Jones

    Tacky Jones www.TaCsmassivecock.gov

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    glad it inspired you
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  15. JASON ANTHONY

    JASON ANTHONY White Devil

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    It inspired me to rape...




    ...myself
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  17. JASON ANTHONY

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    Shoot on me
    I'm a be a dick in your ass
    king of the world yet everything I'm spittin is Trash
    So Shoot on me
    Go informin ya guy
    That I'm a faggot and willing ta give gay porn a try
    Shoot on me
    I'ma be the king of the cock
    Dick standin way up, I'll cream on your crop
    So Shoot on me
    better bring ya own lube
    And I garuntee you and me gon blow the whole tube
    Shoot on me



    fixed*
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