She knows what shes doing

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  1. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    She knows exactly what shes doing
    having fun, making it numb...
    When she awakes everyone will try to fix her
    but she knows what shes doing.
    Trust her once...

    (She dreams)
    One is for the the number of people who love her
    she doesnt sleep with her hatred anymore...
    Two is for the number of times she was hospitalized
    but that gave her time to explore...
    Three symbolizes the trinity,
    the union of her heart, mind, and lack of hope...
    Four is when she shut the door and found where she belonged...
    Five is when she got strong...
    Six is when her house became a home but she was still alone...
    Seven is when the minutes turned to hours and april flowers
    brought may showers...
    Eight is when she could celebrate when somoene lost his power...
    Nine times she was almost at the end of the line...
    but then she realized a line doesnt end.

    Ten brought new things...
    two caloused fingers, paint stained overalls
    and a new set of wings.
    Someday she will bless you with what she brings
    but for now,
    the lady in red
    will live in her head.

    She knows what shes doing
    let her fly.
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  2. GorillaThugMC

    GorillaThugMC Minotaur Orator

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    Nice poem, stuck with the picture until it got more cerebral, liked the last part more than any other parts though!

    (Ten brought new things...
    two caloused fingers, paint stained overalls
    and a new set of wings.
    Someday she will bless you with what she brings
    but for now,
    the lady in red
    will live in her head.) !!
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  3. h.wood

    h.wood IMAGINATION SUPER STAR

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    this was great. i like what you got out of the picture and was going to quote the same lines ^
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  4. TuNed RooT

    TuNed RooT Love is introduction ..

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    Stuck with the concept of the piece throughout writing it. I loved how you would bring the numbers from that hopscotch or whatever into your poem, how you wrote it in and had each number make a true meaning. Great idea, great creativity, originality, everything. Imagery was decent, not much there at all, in my honest opinion. Overall, a nice piece, worth reading, ofcourse.. Like usual. My blessings..
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  5. varentao

    varentao New Member

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    Though the idea of using the numbers may to some, seem a bit obvious. The way you went about using them, was quite original..and very well executed.

    You wrote to the picture well. And ended it so nicely...

    ..resp...
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  6. augee.ali

    augee.ali Lively Up Yourself...

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    Damn Freya!!! You came right with this one for real!!I gotta read that again!*reads again* You made me look bad with this one. lol You also made me look twice.
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  7. lpoet

    lpoet POET

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    wow....this was great......wouldnt have written that if i looked at this pic.......gonna write something to this latter....good job on finding this pic......makes my mind wonder to all sorts of odd places...haha....keep it up
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  8. Feme Sole

    Feme Sole Mrs. _Evil

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    [heart] graci


    glad yall like this picture, you have no idea what i went through to find it, and then have the writing taken off of it lol.......i'm looking for more of todd mcfarlane's work so if anyone can help i'd really appreciate it.......(i dont want any spawn stuff)
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  9. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    This was right, really enjoyed reading this, something i wish i didnt have trouble with. Writting to pictures.

    One luv
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  10. D.B.

    D.B. Death

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    nice piece ma...good job at wriitin' ta a pic..keep it up
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  11. Infonation

    Infonation Info for the Nation

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    I was feelin it, very nice. Didn't have to rhyme, and when it did, it was on point. Your a very vivid writer. But at the same time i like to reach behind your words. I look up to you, as a very talented poetry writer. This was another classic drop, loved it.

    ^One world, one life, one love
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  12. skandelous_lala

    skandelous_lala back from the dead

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    that was dope..very original...i love reading stuff from pictures b/c there is no way two people could see the same thing. good job.
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  13. BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum

    BlackSoultan Ad Infinitum aka Billy Shoreview

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    told ya mine. I think mine was probably my worst.
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