Sense-Less Emotions

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  1. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Thank you ever so much.......lol
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  2. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    uppin once again....

    piece is dope
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  3. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    THANK YOU
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  4. Smoke Trail

    Smoke Trail Writing My Life

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    this was a nice peice, it just seems whatever you do you cant be sure of what life means and what life is bringin you........like the lines and the setup, this was a nice peice and check me out, hit me up on AIM to
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  5. ~*D.Zyre*~

    ~*D.Zyre*~ .::D.Zyre Victory::.

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    damn i'm feelin you on this one...i was feelin this way yesterday..damn..it was hotness.
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  6. Solitude...

    Solitude... I'm Back...!

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    a little short but you are very vivid and at the same time abstract in expressing your emotions and i like it keep it up...
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  7. ChyllTyrant

    ChyllTyrant AmIEternalOrAnEternalist?

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    this was pretty good. i liked the concept, and the writing was pretty well done.

    PEACE
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  8. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks for the critique......its was appreciated....i'll hit you up and check out ya work....
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  9. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks for that response.......
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  10. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks
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  11. This was a cool piece. Up untill the last stanza I couldn't connect the title with sensless emotions. I couldn't tell if it was the emotions causing the struggle or were you just writing about struggles in general. I could relate though, as being emotional builds up cloudy messages in your head and sometimes won't seem to calm down.

    take care
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  12. Sole Sovereign

    Sole Sovereign Hungry But Never Starving

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    This piece reminded me of an onion. I loved the flavor/taste but the texture just didnt sit right with me. It's like your favorite emcee dropping the illest line you ever heard but his delivery sucked with it. Dunno, i just felt it could have been and deserved to be alot smoother.
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  13. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    looking at how many responses this has recieved!!!

    wow 30+ unheard of in the realm.... until now!!
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  14. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Thanks you three guys for your respnses i appreciated it....the critiques and stuff
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  15. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    Yeah maybe since you started postin here.



    Evg.Poet this piece was on the second page. You cant keep uppin it if it goes on the second page.
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  16. rhino_number_33

    rhino_number_33 RRRRROOOOOAAAAARRRR!

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    i liked it, i can relate
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  17. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks.....
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  18. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    If people are tryna give me props why can't I respond back.......
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  19. *Hott Chocolate*

    *Hott Chocolate* current mood: happy

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    nice, creative piece!

    "My emotions are confused
    Not sure what to do
    How can I feel the life I live
    The way I used to?"

    ^i know exactly what u mean
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