Discussion in 'Poetry Realm' started by Evg.poet, Jun 22, 2004.
Thank you ever so much.......lol
uppin once again....
piece is dope
this was a nice peice, it just seems whatever you do you cant be sure of what life means and what life is bringin you........like the lines and the setup, this was a nice peice and check me out, hit me up on AIM to
damn i'm feelin you on this one...i was feelin this way yesterday..damn..it was hotness.
a little short but you are very vivid and at the same time abstract in expressing your emotions and i like it keep it up...
this was pretty good. i liked the concept, and the writing was pretty well done.
thanks for the critique......its was appreciated....i'll hit you up and check out ya work....
thanks for that response.......
This was a cool piece. Up untill the last stanza I couldn't connect the title with sensless emotions. I couldn't tell if it was the emotions causing the struggle or were you just writing about struggles in general. I could relate though, as being emotional builds up cloudy messages in your head and sometimes won't seem to calm down.
This piece reminded me of an onion. I loved the flavor/taste but the texture just didnt sit right with me. It's like your favorite emcee dropping the illest line you ever heard but his delivery sucked with it. Dunno, i just felt it could have been and deserved to be alot smoother.
looking at how many responses this has recieved!!!
wow 30+ unheard of in the realm.... until now!!
Thanks you three guys for your respnses i appreciated it....the critiques and stuff
Yeah maybe since you started postin here.
Evg.Poet this piece was on the second page. You cant keep uppin it if it goes on the second page.
i liked it, i can relate
If people are tryna give me props why can't I respond back.......
nice, creative piece!
"My emotions are confused
Not sure what to do
How can I feel the life I live
The way I used to?"
^i know exactly what u mean
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