Sense-Less Emotions

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  1. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Mr.Intentional
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    Ramble---once more

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    I’m looking
    But I just can’t see
    My eyes are open
    Maybe I just don’t believe
    I’m a determined person
    Somehow I’ve lost my faith
    How much longer must I endure
    These tests I have to take?

    I’m listening
    But I just can’t hear
    My ears are open
    So what gives?
    I’m always alert
    I try to be on time
    What exactly is it about me
    That I insist on trying to hide?

    I’m touching
    But can’t feel anything
    My hands are moving
    My heart just doesn’t feel
    My emotions are confused
    Not sure what to do
    How can I feel the life I live
    The way I used to?
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  2. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    Yea i feel you on this one, i dropped suttin about feelin'lost' and covered emotions and shti you did in urs rite here, anywayz, i liked this, hope it aint tru thou? Hope to think any1 feels like that!
    Much Lv
    *S*
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  3. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks for the response......wheni write poetry its as if my subconscious takes over.....my poetry is where i admitt alot of my business.....so yea i guess i do feel this way
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  4. MarQuise*

    MarQuise* Can You Hear Me*

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    It aint nice feelin that way, and the way you write wit ur emotions etc, alot of poets do it, i know myself all of my poetry has come from the heart, except for when doin shit in the tourney. The best poetry from me is real, and is alwayz true to me! Anywayz, hate to ask cud u peep my drop? lol, i been away for a while, and i jus dnt wanna see it gettin slept on, coz it prolly my last drop for a hella long time!

    Much Lv
    *S*
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  5. nathedawg

    nathedawg New Member

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    Im lookin

    Im listening

    Im touching

    This really helped in expressing exactly what you were doing, what i got out of it is that u are just unsure about life and what it has in store for you.Basically reminescing on the past and wishing it could be the same.

    i liked this piece, very short, but you put out all the information in such a expressive way.!! good job evg. poet peace out
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  6. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul I'm Pretty

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    ^tooshort broke it down good with the first lines in each stanza. Nice way to express yourself.


    one luv
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  7. Clarksvegas_Dan

    Clarksvegas_Dan Registered Voter

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    I really like your style. lol. Good stuff.
    I think maybe you and I come from somewhat different backgrounds but are still working for the same objective. Cool Drop can't wait to see more. Peace.
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  8. mczpananzi

    mczpananzi RipppOne

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    really feelin what you wrote.. feelin numb and lost at the same time as to where your path may be taking you to the near future is something the scares a lot of us. you aint alone on this one.. *prOps

    oNe
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  9. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    Thanks to you all for all your reponses....greatly appreciated
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  10. InTheStars

    InTheStars Reflective

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    I really thought this was great. I know that I have felt the same way and partly do at this moment. You have sumed it all up right here. Great Post..lovin' the color choice too. lol
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  11. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    thanks for the rersponse and stuff...i really appreciate it....oh the color pink....i hate.....just using to express my emotions
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  12. Xero Satsujin

    Xero Satsujin OnLy gOd kNoWs oR Goes

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    Yeah, too short hit it hard on the head...but anyway, this was good cause I definitely enjoyed it...Keep ya head up thow Row...
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  13. Zeta

    Zeta New Member

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    I liked this it reminds me of when I'm critical of my self and thus begin to close up to others around me afraid they'll see what I'm seeing at the moment, that's how i took it anyway
    Peace
    One luv
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  14. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    wow...i got a compliment from XERO.....lol....thanks
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  15. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    everyone has ther own interpretation for what the read....thanks for the response
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  16. flowz

    flowz warrior

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    yuhh this piece was tight and creative i like it
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  17. nathedawg

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    I’m looking
    But I just can’t see
    My eyes are open
    Maybe I just don’t believe
    I’m a determined person
    Somehow I’ve lost my faith
    How much longer must I endure
    These tests I have to take?

    this really stuck out to me the second time reading this....

    good work.....evg poet,.... and i really mean that
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  18. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    THANKS LUV....I ALWAYS APPRECIATE IT WHEN PEOPLE RESPOND POSITIVELY TO MY POST.........(NEGATIVE ALWAYS WELCOME THOUGH(LOL)
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  19. Evg.poet

    Evg.poet As the Heart Speaks...

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    THANK YA MUCH........
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  20. kyza soza

    kyza soza This way up.

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    Justifiably so. This piece was real ncie i thought.. i definately enjoyed the read, it kept me interested no doubt.. Keep dropping and stay active

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