Scribe & TAB --- "Bitch Please" --- Drop Feed And Links

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  1. TAB

    TAB Model

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  2. Member-k

    Member-k French Rapper

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    Yeah it's a good song

    Good hook with scribe
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  3. Ben Official

    Ben Official Active Member

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    this beat, i know ive heard it a million times think i downloaded it before

    tab- shit was cool, flow was straight but when you went fast alot of times it seemed like it was a lil late beatwise, semeed like it would have worked better if u said it a few syllables before, somethin sounds late about it. delivery is cool, this was nice, lyrics were funny lmfao

    scribe- shits was nice also, flow a lot different than tabs, delivery is pretty good, the hooks pretty nice too

    both came on point over all

    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=926382
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  4. KamikazeLyricist

    KamikazeLyricist The Kamikaze Lyricist

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    listenin ... the beats raw ... fat bitch was gross lol ... at times it was off beat when you sped up the flow .... next MC not bad comin wit a slower more comforatable style ...
    Fillopian lol ... not bad concept is different but kinda funny .... Nice drop stay Up Pz
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  5. GODSCRIBE

    GODSCRIBE Meet the Retailer

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    wooord. i recorded my verse at the end of last year in school not that its relevant.

    lol@takes a break to eat her reeses..

    tab has some lyrics yo
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  6. MagicFX

    MagicFX Idle

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    damn.. I'm trying to hear this.. SC must be acting bitch right now.. I'll stop back in a bit and giya some feed.. yup
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  7. Sicwitit

    Sicwitit whattup my goods

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    lol this joint was dope

    TAB......goddamn @ ur flow...dunno why some people think its off the structure was insane...breath control is getting better every time...rhyme schemes were complex as fuck...LMGAO(laughin my gangsta ass off) @ some of these lines..had to rewind them a few times tho..."lost my virginity to her bellyhole" haha..."her dad used the umbillical chord as a gas line to suck some beer from it" LOL...the before and after pic of her skeleton was an ill line...

    Scribe......first time peepin u...voice is ill as fuck...i like the contrast between ur flow and tab's..makes the track diverse and more interesting to listen to...the cocky delivery is dope...lines were hilarious..."i had to ger ass a green card" lol..."horse hair had stallions up in arms"..."just a kiss i dont touch the lips under ur coat" haha....

    wasnt feelin the hook

    everything else was ill
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  8. MagicFX

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    this track is hot..

    tab.. you come nice with flow and funny lines..

    I like that when you speed up and slow down your flow.. shit's catchy..

    if anything.. could have used a bit more energy in your voice.. but your verse was nice..

    scribe.. that hook is tight.. and damn.. you can rap..

    you have flow and delivery both workin' for you here..

    good lyrics.. your style is alot different than tab.. but still the song sounds cool..

    your verse is more...... I don't know.. "hood" than tabs.. which is more appealing to my ears.. but yea.. I liked this..

    you both shine.
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  9. V.I.K

    V.I.K The Feedback Returner

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    1st verse - Flow's crazy fast. Pretty cool that u can do that. Stays on point, too. Well done. Doubles are well done. Its difficult to double up something fast, but u do it pretty well. Nice job here too. Your presence could use a little work. Uve got the beginning stages of it down (you emphasis words at the end of your bars), but ure not too far from being monotone. Although, it might be the fact that u spittin fast, i mean its kinda hard to be emotional on top of flowin that fast. Just watch for it in the future... Id suggest getting into adlibs too. Especially on a track like this, where ure tryna tell somethin funny... Adlibs can easily add to that comical nature, or a song of any nature for that matter. So look to use em... Solid verse though.

    Hook - Nothing special... Its a solid hook though. Next time double up on it and pan it out to make it stand out more.

    2nd verse - Nice delivery. Opens up with a different flow, which stays consistent throughout the verse. Nice job. Doubles are off in this beginning section though. A good way to avoid this is doubling up less... Either that, or just try and say it the same way u rhymed it first. U fix up after this point though. Way to recover. Presence wise, this verse is pretty solid. U do a few good things. One being changing up the tone of your voice. Well done. Caught like 1 or 2 adlibs in here as well. While i commend u, i think u coulda used some more. Your verse has potential for animation. Adlibs couldve helped in this area. Either way, a solid verse.

    Overall - A solid song. 2 well delivered verses, few mistakes. Hook isn't jumping out at me, but its not terrible. Keep it up ya'll. 1

    Get at me...
    http://board.rapmusic.com/showthread.php?t=928440
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  10. GODSCRIBE

    GODSCRIBE Meet the Retailer

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    appreciate the detailed response hoss, ill hit your link up as soon as im done with this movie
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  11. SHITTY Bang Bang

    SHITTY Bang Bang freestyle fanatic

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    Lmao @ Shaving.....
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  12. RiGhTHeMi$pHeRe

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    Okay...TAB up first...i like this beat...kinda a salsa feel:)...lol...your voice sounds kinda...DZK'ish...like...computer generated-n-shit...but word...flow sounds kinda like...every1 else on this site does for battles-n-what-not...ya know...like when u spit kinda semi-slow...and then speed it up...outta nowhere...kinda like that...it's kinda hard to listen to it...not bad...just...u might wanna variate...your boy...wow...lotta punch ins...lol...i like his voice-n-flow a bit better tho...but he could variate his voice a little too...i like the song idea tho...fucka bitch...lol..."till it's all about bills like buffalo man"...meh:-/...lol...anyway...not see/nazi...the wordplay is a little weird...the song isn't that bad...but i don't think i'd give it another listen...probably...a 6/10...if y'all animate your voice a lil more...it'd probably be better...but other than that...not a bad trakk...maybe fix tha flow here-n-there...uno:)...
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  13. TOOBxSOCKS

    TOOBxSOCKS Code of the Samurai

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    returnin feed:

    well maybe not....they fucked up with this soundclick mp3 player shit....i have more problems with soundclick than i did before they made that mp3 player thing....ima try later man....cuz i ALWAYS return feedback....but if it dont owrk i dunno...i would just download it, but im on dial-up ,,,
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  14. Ike Love

    Ike Love Gengis Con

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    tab - that verse had me rollin
    i like the lil story u tellin
    lyrics is alright

    scribe - u came wit it on the hook
    verse was alright i think both u guys could of came a lil bit harder
    but the song is still alright, will make a good track on the album
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  15. FinesseNYC

    FinesseNYC FinessetheGreat

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    track is cool. never heard tab but i know scribe comes bananas like 100x better than this

    straight shit though doggies
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  16. Hystwise

    Hystwise Ni66a Pleez

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    expressin myself lol

    yo, off the top i like this beat...sounds alil like DZK to me, the first dude does...lol, damn..a fat chick is gonna kill you for this "introduce you to my diet plan, all u gotta do is commit suicide"...i like how u doin that flippin flow though..shave between the creases? lol...Scribe delivery sounds pretty nice, delivery and flow and shit.."every chick wants to be a mother so fast",lol wordup..hook was pretty good, i woulda added an underlyin vocal under it..idk, thats jus me though..but nice track though

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  17. TAB

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  18. FinesseNYC

    FinesseNYC FinessetheGreat

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    jerz nice ass flow.......beat raw ass hell.......my ••••• scribe doing it big on this.....y'all •••••z do y'all thing.


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  19. Unda Dwella

    Unda Dwella Do you matter?

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    2nd peep came more on a Killah Priest kind of vibe. I'm a fan of this beat and love Priest shit, hook did the job on this one, first peep was decent too. 2nd peep did shine more on this track to me tho I'd probably have laced this with more of a Priest kinda subject. Solid tho.

    Stay up.
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  20. GODSCRIBE

    GODSCRIBE Meet the Retailer

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    my dun when you want to link peeps to your page, copy and paste the address from that url bar thingy...so you can link them straight to the page...instead of your website.
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