Scented Tears .

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    Scented Tears .


    ........I feel a tear,
    it's quiet voice subsiding
    & all is silent,
    as the feeling is rising..
    Not a tear of sadness,
    a tear of joy
    This tear of happiness,
    is ready to deploy
    I can smell the scent,
    the sweet aroma
    My senses are waking,
    from within their coma
    I feel so alive,
    embraced by this scent
    & feel the warmth,
    that my heart presents
    The wheels are in motion,
    moving with haste
    Now the scented teardrop,
    is becoming a taste
    As the light turns to day,
    the sunshine drifts away
    My mind starts to wonder,
    the joy leads astray
    I feel a tear, a tear of isolation,
    a tear of my own
    A cold scent represents,
    the coldness of been alone
    The day gets wrapped,
    in the night skys ribbons
    & the teardrops merge,
    like streaming rivers
    Leaving nothing but darkness,
    pure emptyness
    Now i feel another tear
    & know its not ment for this
    A scent of hope,
    this time will only last a while
    A scent of happiness,
    the sure recipe for a smile !
    test
  2. blackNwhitegirl

    blackNwhitegirl Fallen Angel

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    thanx for dropping, keep up the good work, the title made me come read initially....(blacknwhitegirl aka mocha-licious)
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    cheers .
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    Shame i only got one comment .
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  5. Coup d'état

    Coup d'état Don't believe the hype

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    Just saw this and I like a lot what you did with this behind the scenes so to speak. I loved how the tear drop depends on the cycle of the sun and that it dictates how the tear is expirenced. Also is this a metaphor of Winter darkness?

    I feel this, and I almost want to say it's suggestive of seasonal depression. I get mad ill in winter, and I usally turn for Florida to combat the northern bleakness. When spring hits, I'm mad crazy busy. How about you text ?

    Very nice rendition here man. Props

    let me know what you think.
    test
  6. Text

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    ^ cheers Coup, yea the original title was Tears Of Seasons , but then i kinda perfered Scented Tears. yea winter gets me down too, too much night not enough day not ta mention the weather lol but living in england means theres no escaping it hah. ah well. thanks for taking time to read this man & summer is on the horizon once again, cant wait .
    test
  7. ebonisunset

    ebonisunset Nemesis of Truth

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    Snap!!snap!!snap!! Good 1
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